Agree or disagree:
At universities and college, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Views differ when it come to the amount of money universities should assign to different part of its campus. Some people may hold the view that unversities should spend most of their money on libraries and classes because they are more vital for student. However, others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that sport and social activities should receive equal financial support as libraries and classes. In my perspective, sports and social groups are as important as classes and universities should give a like amount of money to them. I will pinpoint the most outstanding points in the fallowing paragraphs.
The first exquisite reason is that engaging in sports and social activities are essential for students' health. Students devote most of their time on study materials their professor give to them. These amount of study make students tired or may put them under pressure which is dangerous for their bodies and effect their performance. However, people who do sport exercise, will gain more energy which is suitable for their health. Therefore, attending in social activities and sports class will help students to release their tension and negative thoughts. After that, students can concentrate better on their study which enhance the quality of their study. Moreover, sports help student to be healthier since they only study. Sports like footballs which people should run in that is extremely useful for students since circulate their blood on their body. So, sports will improve the strength of students’ body which is crucial for their future life and health.
The further more subtle point worth mentioning is that students can acquire new skills. In the present era, the ability to communicate with other have a great influence on people lives. If a person do not have a socialize skill, he will be alone in the societies. Plenty of students learn the essential abilities in universities to have a good career in their life. But the problem is that it is not enough to become successful since universities do not teach communication skill. Hence, a person who attend in social and sport activities will learn how to iterate with other people which is a necessary skill. Also, being in a part of group is a good opportunity for students to be more responsible. Every person have a responsibility in a group and if he do not complete his role, he will face consequences of his action. Hence, people will become more mature in their future life since they have relevant experience in the past. For instance, my friend was our goal keeper in college's football team. His role was to look for the ball but he make a mistake and after that he was really embarrassed by his mistake.
To make a long story short, Based on the aforementioned argument, there are more advantageous for students if universities give equal money to group activities because not only make students more healthy, but also they lean how to communicate and be friend with others. Therefore, it is extremely beneficial for students to join group activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 22, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comes'?
Suggestion: comes
Views differ when it come to the amount of money universities sho...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... which is dangerous for their bodies and effect their performance. However, peopl...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...n people lives. If a person do not have a socialize skill, he will be alone in the societie...
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Line 3, column 714, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...ts to be more responsible. Every person have a responsibility in a group and if he d...
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Line 3, column 757, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...e a responsibility in a group and if he do not complete his role, he will face con...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'makes'.
Suggestion: makes
...is role was to look for the ball but he make a mistake and after that he was really ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, really, so, therefore, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2545.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67340620065 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459724950884 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 792.0 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6535737731 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2592592593 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8518518519 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.74074074074 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174923143998 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560957347728 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805498385735 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128786348901 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113213103548 0.0645574589148 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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