Nowadays, technological advancements make a plethora of changes in people's lives, so that the way that they live is quite different form the past. There is a controversy between people that whether these changes make more satisfactory and happiness in their lives or not. A popular belief in this regard is that they are much happier with their lives than people were in the past, whereas, the other group of people have a complete opposite view about this idea. Personally, I agree with the former. In the ensuing lines, I will attempt to support this idea through 2 reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that technological advancements, like the internet, make people to be more satisfied with their lives. Internet enables people to be aware of what is going on around the globe. In the past, people were living in a remote area. If there was an event happening in the world, they had to wait for a long time in order to be informed about it. Also, if people wanted to get informed regarding their relatives, they had to write a letter to them, which took a several days to get a response. That being said, by advancing in technology and appearance of the internet, people's lives have changed completely. Today, they are not secluded anymore. They can be informed regarding the events happening around the world immediately by reading news on the internet and through social networks. Besides, if they want to make a communication with their relatives, who are living in another country, they can write a letter to them and send it via email and get its response immediately or follow them in social networks, such as facebook, instagram, or twitter. Thus, today, people are much happier and more satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
The second reason which deserves some words here is that medical advancements make people to live much longer than the past. Today, people can cure their illnesses much easier. In the past, the medical science was not very advanced. Many sicknesses were not identified to people and there was a possibility that they died due to a simple cold. That being said, thanks to the advancements in technology, the medical science is very advanced today. The reason of many diseases are marked today and people can prevent themselves from them. For example, they know that the reason of catching cold can be dirty hands and thus, If they get sick, there are a considerable number of pills and vaccins they can use in order to feel better. Also, doctors are now more capable to monitor the cause of these diseases by using high-tech devices and as a result, they can help people to live much longer than the past. Hence, people are now much happier with their lives than people in the past.
To put it all in a nutshell, nowadays, thanks to the technological advancements, people are much happier with their lives than the past owing to the fact that unlike the 100 years ago, people can be more in contact with each other by using the internet. Also today, people can cure a wide range of sicknesses due to advancements in medicine science and as a result, they can live much longer than the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 509, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'day'?
Suggestion: day
... a letter to them, which took a several days to get a response. That being said, by ...
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Line 4, column 254, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... with each other by using the internet. Also today, people can cure a wide range of...
^^^^
Line 4, column 265, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...other by using the internet. Also today, people can cure a wide range of sickness...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, hence, if, regarding, second, so, thus, whereas, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2615.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 553.0 407.700716846 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7287522604 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51505153177 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423146473779 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 821.7 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2406710005 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.576923077 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2692307692 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36234122161 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132609886664 0.076458572812 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11691147125 0.0737576698707 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264568391303 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358517533438 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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