Boys and girls should attend separate schools.(7)
Some people may argue that attending schools for students should be divided by their gender. But, in my opinion, it seems having more disadvantages than advantages. So, I completely disagree with the statement that boys and girls should attend separate schools.
First of all, students could get a distorted view for gender issue, if they only spend their school life with friends who have same sex with them. In other words, it is needed to form a balanced perspective about problems which is made by gender. Recently, one of the big issue about men and women is that some of popular singers raped women rely on the illegal drugs and took the sex videos for sharing with their close friends. I was shocked when I heard the issue because the male singers share videos which are really disgusting for ordinary people just for fun. It was recognized most of them graduated from male high schools. It seems that they really needed appropriate communication with girls from their young.
Furthermore, it can be unfair for students who have different physical gender with what they want to be. They should not divided by their apparent sex. When I was working in Fiji, one of my friends was gay and he was not able to do surgery for switching his gender because he didn't have enough money. But he was really wishing to change his sex. Furthermore, he confessed me he was having really hard time because he was forced to go school only for male even he think himself a girl. It would be not happen if they did not divide their school by their physical outlook sex.
To sum up, it is totally unnecessary to divide schools by their gender. Students have to learn together without classify. It is not helpful for students in order to form their balanced view for gender issues. Moreover, it is inappropriate for young students divide by their given sex.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'divide'
Suggestion: divide
...h what they want to be. They should not divided by their apparent sex. When I was worki...
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Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ery for switching his gender because he didnt have enough money. But he was really wi...
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Line 3, column 308, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ause he didnt have enough money. But he was really wishing to change his sex. Furthermore, he conf...
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Line 3, column 463, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...rced to go school only for male even he think himself a girl. It would be not happen ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 575, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r school by their physical outlook sex. To sum up, it is totally unnecessary to ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, really, so, as for, first of all, in my opinion, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70987654321 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39848774944 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521604938272 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2833724534 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.3157894737 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0526315789 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52631578947 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118572709981 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0533118525911 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137751370331 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120945191855 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.171399610789 0.0645574589148 265% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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