A/D: “Working at home using computers or telephones is better than working in the office.”
Nowadays, thanks to technology, people are able to fulfill various assignments almost everywhere by electronic devices. this raises the question that what is the better choice between working at home using computers or telephones and working in the office. I hold the belief that doing jobs at home is more ideal than in the office for the following two reasons.
First of all, people working at home can save a huge amount of energy and commuting time since they don’t need to travel to work every day. For example, my girlfriend is an administrative assistant at a small company, she is allowed to work at home. she can sleep until 9 am every working day, which is an hour later than me. after waking up, she makes a cup of coffee and eat a flavorful breakfast leisurely, making herself full power. then she can directly start working at her computer desk. All these processes just take her 30 minutes. However, as a commuter, I have to wake up at 7 am and take public transportation to the office every morning, which takes me more than one hour. When I arrive at the office, I am always exhausted.
Secondly, working at own house can enhance workers’ quality of concentration, since they can handle their work environment and not be bothered by other colleagues. take my girlfriend as an example again. after she began to work at home, she created a tidy, quiet, and well-lighted workplace in her room. So that she could not only focus more on her responsibilities, but also finish double business assignments than before. If she had to discuss some problems with co-workers, she just needed to contact them by telephone in less than 10 minutes and then continued to immerse in the work. On the other hand, two years ago, she worked in a crowded office that includes 8 departments. she had to deal with many tiny or unimportant affairs from colleagues, interns, and other members of her company. this clearly distracts her from the most necessary business.
To conclude, I do support that working at home using computers or telephones is better than working in the office. Because it not only saves workers a lot of energy and commuting time, but also help them concentrate more efficiently on their job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81770833333 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7352776288 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580729166667 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7629533529 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0952380952 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19047619048 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.481396042955 0.236089414692 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147387140842 0.076458572812 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.177869586682 0.0737576698707 241% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.355250905111 0.150856017488 235% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0966183729683 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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