For the development of a country, it's more important to spend money on education of very young children（5-10years）than to spend on universities.
How to develop a country successfully has attracted much social concern. many politicians have argued that it is crucial to invest in the education of very young children rather than universities. personally, I find this statement reasonable.
First and foremost, what I put in my priority is economy stimulus. The fact is that, by spend money on the very young children education, it creates a chance for children to gain much more knowledge when they are still small. thus, it is possible for them to possess a sturdy background. accordingly, it may help them to be more creative and to work more effectively when they grow up. consequently, there is likelihood that the country’s economy is certain to derive a lot of benefits from fully educated children. More interestingly, when government uses much money for young children education, it will result in an increase in the number of well-study children. thus, it is certain for children to be better and smarter when they grow up. hence, it is likely to give rise to the number of talent people in the future. As the result, they will play an important role in the economy development. indeed, when young children education receive more money from government, it makes a significant contribute to the country’s economy.
On the other hand, some people might say that young children from five to ten years old have not developed their self-awareness enough. therefore, it is wasted a lot of money for their education to improve their country. however, it is not always true. In fact, the young children have a special ability which is fast learning. hence, it is possible for them to gain much knowledge and improve skills even they have not had enough self-awareness. moreover, investing in young children education will result in the increase the quality of education and the facilities which help the children with their study. consequently, children are likely to study easier and more effectively. these children are a key factor influence on the country development when they start working. As the result, government is able to gain benefit when spend money on young children education. With no doubt, the idea that it is not effective when young children get the investment from government is possible to end in collapse.
To sum up, the economy stimulus is a convincing reason for my choice. it is highly recommended that politicians should take my writing into great consideration to make an appropriate decision on successfully developing their country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, well, in fact, no doubt, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2128.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11538461538 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95959835928 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475961538462 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4737027794 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.12 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.64 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363590149388 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937816321142 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0801635644842 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202102750865 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815390625781 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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