Do you agree of disagree with following statement?Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by Somayya on Sun, 01/05/2020 - 05:55

As a human being, every individual needs amusement at his/her leisure, by the way we could do our other activities as well, I mean amusement and having fun in our free time is known a vital factor of our life as social activities but if don’t we have a good schedule for our free time it could damage our future life. Children are the new generation which are learning new thing day by day and a their ability for learning is high than adults for but next to their scheme for learning new things they need to have fun like adults. I disagree with the statement which claims computer games waste the time and kids should not allowed to play with for many reasons.
First, most of the computer game could increase the kids thinking ability among to solve problems. As all we know all games has lots of challenges and by increasing the levels, challenges would be more difficult, and it help children o find the way to solve that problems and it is a appreciable ability. For instance; the snake game can teach two excellent things for kids, first they know just by feeding we could grow up, then they will break the brittle to level up.
Second, almost all kids like playing by computer, mobile and other technologies, so not allowing children to play game is an unavoidable matter. According to psychology when we proscribe someone to do something we encourage them to do that for example; we I say “Do not think about black dogs” I ordered you to think about it so we can not avoid children to play games instead we could make a time schedule for them in order to teach them how to manage their time from childhood.
Finally, we should allow the children to enjoy their childhood as well but don’t let them to damage their healthy, for example; when we don’t allow the children to play game I could damage his/her mentality. Therefor we have to find a replacement for computer games then they themselves will leave playing by computers. For instance, playing football is more interested for children than anything else.
The best conclusion to be drawn from this topic is to allow children to enjoy their life but not allow to abuse from computer or anything else, making a time schedule which contains lesson, playing games, feeding time and sleeping time could help us to teach them how to use their time as well.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 400, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'a' or 'their'?
Suggestion: a; their
...h are learning new thing day by day and a their ability for learning is high than adult...
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Line 1, column 630, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'allow'
Suggestion: allow
...ames waste the time and kids should not allowed to play with for many reasons. First, ...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 638, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'playing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: playing
...te the time and kids should not allowed to play with for many reasons. First, most of ...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 220, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
...llenges would be more difficult, and it help children o find the way to solve that p...
^^^^
Line 2, column 282, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...he way to solve that problems and it is a appreciable ability. For instance; the ...
^
Line 5, column 104, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'abusing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: abusing
...ldren to enjoy their life but not allow to abuse from computer or anything else, making ...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, so, then, well, for example, for instance, i mean, by the way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64182692308 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45058291995 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471153846154 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.5656796027 48.9658058833 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.916666667 100.406767564 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.6666666667 20.6045352989 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264529390332 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121767066222 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991797838484 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163429753378 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055205983979 0.0645574589148 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 11.7677419355 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.89 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 10.002688172 290% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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