Do you agree that it is better to work for business owned by someone else than to work for the business of one’s own family
In this day and age, people are under enormous pressure and fierce competition while finding jobs, although exposed to all kinds of job opportunities. Thus, there are increasingly more people who support working for the business of their own family. However, as far as I am concerned, I contend that working for companies own by someone else is a better way to improve one’s comprehensive abilities such as solving problems individually and analyzing complex issues than working for one’s own family.
Initially, without the protection and tolerance from parents, working for others force young people to enhance their practical skills. More precisely, parents tend to endure and forgive their kids easily when they make mistakes, so people who choose to work under parents’ care will never learn lessons. Besides, It is too comfortable to live with parents that people always lose their ambition, which will eventually discourage productivity and even lead to failure. On the contrary, people have to work hard to earn their living while working for others. Therefore, they will raise the requirements for themselves and strive to obtain praise form their leaders to obtain more bonus. Take my uncle as example, in dogged pursuit of career success, he joined an investment bank, where he usually work into deep nights. Apart form routine tasks, he read mountains of professional books to fulfill himself. Had it not been his constant effort, he would not have fought his way to be a outstanding role model of his colleagues.
Some one may assert that working for one’s own family enables people to build more close rapports between family members, stating that people are less likely to catch mental diseases. Nevertheless, plausible as it sounds, the opinion does not hold water. Nowadays, social media and instant message apps are so advanced that people can get touch with their parents whenever they want. What’s more, If the business of one’s own family is the field that someone is not interested in at all, it will be arduous for him to waste his precious time. As for the mental diseases, people who work for others can encounter lots of like-minded friends. They will not only develop their interpersonal skills, but also earn life-long friendships instead of complicated interest relations. For instance, I often seek help from my friends when I was placed in a dilemma. Sometimes I dissolved into tears, pouring out all the negative emotions and encouraged myself to look forward.
In conclusion, according to all the factors mentioned above, I firmly believe that working for others is more conductive to people’s self-improvements than working for ones’ own family. It’s significance can never be stressed more.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
... themselves and strive to obtain praise form their leaders to obtain more bonus. Tak...
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Line 3, column 824, Rule ID: APART_FORM[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'apart from'?
Suggestion: Apart from
...where he usually work into deep nights. Apart form routine tasks, he read mountains of pro...
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Line 3, column 986, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... he would not have fought his way to be a outstanding role model of his colleague...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Someone'?
Suggestion: Someone
...anding role model of his colleagues. Some one may assert that working for one's ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, while, as for, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2337.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27539503386 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8094833881 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604966139955 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9698506977 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.285714286 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0952380952 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395005434734 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113184741631 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135641221125 0.0737576698707 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290232924051 0.150856017488 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112100828224 0.0645574589148 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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