Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
History often shows that successful people have not relied on only one criterion in their life. our lives include some hardship and difficulties that we endure to attain our ambitions and be successful in our life. if we narrow down and look at this on a smaller scale we can see that Many people suggest that working hard during their studies at school is the critical point to succeed in their career but others contribute the success to social relationship and communication with other members of our society. As far as I regarded, success will not come only because we have tried hard with our study but prosper is depend on how we use this knowledge and in which way we relate to other people.
First of all, one of the basic and fundamental aspects of any job is teamwork and a high degree of communication with other people. Many jobs need different people with different skills that complete each other. If they are not a healthy relationship their performances will be in the lowest degree. For example, one of my friends is a computer engineer. He worked in a company as a developer and there another team as a bug solver (this group study the software that my friend and his group created). There was always contention between these two groups about others' works. Consequently, instead of solving the problem fast and accurately they delayed their work. On the other hand, my friend is working in another company and there are two groups who accept each other and try to improve their product and complete the job coincidently instead of impeding the improvement of work. Communication and relating with other is much important than a knowledge that we cannot use appropriately.
Next, Experience of others would be the essential part of our success; thus communicate and appreciate others is vital to absorb people’s knowledge. People in the entry-level job do not know and do not have enough experience with a practical job in spite of the fact that they have gotten a high GPA. People with a higher level of experience must be appreciated and be requested to share their knowledge. Several years ago I was working in a project of installation of a power plant. There some newly graduated student who was aloof and they did not have a clue about asking for information and they were ashamed about asking a question. Although they were in a high level of theory about the job they needed to start to communicate with other stuff and learn from them. Being isolated and depend on our understanding will never lead us to a better place in our career.
Appreciate other’s opinions and being kind to criticism make a person well-known and help them to reach a higher degree in a job and also in the society. There are many people who had not been graduated from university or they were excluded from school now are the most successful people in the world. Many people in who never finished their study but got the best place in their career such as Stew Jobs, who excluded from university but built the best computer and mobile company in the world. So university hardship does not guarantee our success and vice versa, lacking hard study time does not prevent us from being successful. For instance, municipal in our city does not finish his study at university but because of his amazing relationship with people and high acceptance among people receiving a higher level in his job. Success will not come if we do not know how to impart that people.
In the nutshell, for some people prosperous in the job might be a consequence of their hard study in university but I oppose this opinion and advocate the communication with people and having a passion for them in the highest level of importance for a succe4ssful person in his job. Good relation, learn from other skill full knowledge and receive other’s acceptance would be crucial points for a successful person.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Our
...ed on only one criterion in their life. our lives include some hardship and difficu...
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Line 1, column 216, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...mbitions and be successful in our life. if we narrow down and look at this on a sm...
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Line 2, column 212, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ferent skills that complete each other. If they are not a healthy relationship the...
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Line 2, column 942, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'knowledge'.
Suggestion: knowledge
...ating with other is much important than a knowledge that we cannot use appropriately. Next...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, look, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, such as, first of all, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 37.0 13.8261648746 268% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3219.0 1977.66487455 163% => OK
No of words: 675.0 407.700716846 166% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76888888889 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.09713273454 4.48103885553 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66559813983 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.425185185185 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1009.8 618.680645161 163% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8505110688 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.964285714 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1071428571 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92857142857 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.059877908078 0.236089414692 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0210419264746 0.076458572812 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309267122393 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0386961617017 0.150856017488 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.017395543203 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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