Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
University education is a prerequisite for every student to shape their career specializing in one particular area in which they have a profound interest. Before attaining a university education, high-school coursework affords an excellent platform to realize the direction of the students. Regarding the phase between high school and university education, although some may accede to that gap about a year to travel or work will be detrimental to the career of the individual, I argue that it will a far more beneficial for several reasons. I will be substantiating my position in the following paragraphs.
The foremost reason why I am in support of a particular idea is: it will help the students to fully explore their interests and confirm what they like to do in their careers. In today's world, only a few of the students can decide what they like to do in their career and choose particular subjects in their university may be due to their incapability of taking decisions or any other factors. Thus, it is paramount to make wise decisions based upon one's interest and proceed accordingly. For the supporting example, one needs no look further than my own experience. After completing my high school degree (with a science major), I started working in the ward community as a junior assistant to a technical engineer. During the process, I experienced the impact of civil engineering on the society of such rural communities as I was assisting him with the reconstruction of earthquake-resistant houses. Consequently, I realized my propensity towards civil engineering. Subsequently, after 9 months of working as a junior assistant, I got admitted to the university with a civil engineering major. Had I not worked for that period, I would not have realized my interest.
Another subtle reason that strengthens my argument is that students will have the opportunity to garnish some of the additional skills that will certainly aid them in the process of university education. Four years of study greatly demands a host of things including your effort and also, the sum of money for tuition fees and living expenses. So in a year's time, you can easily focus on something that will augment your skills. The evident example can be seen in one of my friend's academic journeys. Coming from the rural community of Nepal, he felt that he was quite short of the funds required for the first year of his undergraduate study. Therefore, he decided to take a few time gaps and cater coffee training skills working in the popular coffee show. He invested almost a year in it and as a result, he was able to land a part-time job as the coffee maker in the five-star restaurants (which obviously pays well) to fund his education. Finally, he was very happy to study his subject of interest. As you can see, catering skills will be beneficial for the students.
Recapitulating all the above-mentioned reasons, I affirm that gap will be extremely beneficial as it will confirm your interests in your career and assist to develop some beneficial skills.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, consequently, finally, first, look, may, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, well, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2564.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01761252446 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99542455638 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520547945205 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 816.3 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2826375712 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.47826087 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2173913043 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4347826087 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184147136968 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05101761852 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366066178887 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103673072727 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044954512272 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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