Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
These days a lot of school curriculums include some music and art class to improve their student’s artistic views and disclosure their hidden talents in their early years. In my opinion, it doesn’t have to be a necessity for all students instead of it they can offer more variety of subjects and classes to students to give plenty of time to try all of them. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, Proposing different classes and subjects will broaden their horizon and more help to find their true competent areas for trying all of them not just stick in arts or music. I have to admit that my opinion has been profoundly influenced by my experience. When I was in a secondary school, to be honest with you, I am not talented at singing and playing an instrument because I know that those great gifts are inherited from their parents. As a matter of fact, in my family, no one can play instrument due to the fact that it doesn't mean that they haven't tried it because they don't have any pure talents in those areas. For me, I always prefer to take more science classes over it because I deeply discern that I truly love doing scientific research but the school has always required to take an art class. This compulsory classes wasted my time lot because I would have plenty of time to concentrate on my scientific projects if I didn’t take those class. As a result, I failed on my scientific project competition on account of this school basis.
Secondly, Pushing children to do something, leads to more negative consequences in the future. Drawing from my brother’s experience, he always annoyed and deviates from my parents when they force him to do something which he even doesn’t desire to do it. One day he missed a class deliberately as usual and wandered around the school then some of the students provoked him to do some criminal or illegal thing, interestingly, he immediately accepted that request because he didn’t want to attend school art class which was actually he missed one. This obviously affected his grades adversely and behaviours too. This example demonstrates how straining children to do something that they don’t want brings a lot of problems to their bright future.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that schools should offer many classes and subjects which are available for all students and they can take if they want instead of forcing them to study arts and music class. This is because it is crucial to find their great abilities for trying everything they want in their young age rather than jamming in one class and because it is insurmountable difficult to students who don’t want to take those courses.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, second, secondly, so, then, as for, i feel, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2268.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80508474576 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7171822859 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.9008497052 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.411764706 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7647058824 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23529411765 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152489294621 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527212407494 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463306769973 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104468779722 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022179907337 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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