Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
Since the beginning of civilization humanity has been sparing time to the extra curriculum activities from generation to generation. An opinion exists that modern pupils must explore craft and chime in their schools. I completely agree with the above mentioned statement due to the reasons marked hereinafter.
Firstly, scrutiny of the music or art worlds develops students’ imagination and the ability to think extraordinary in various life situations. When people discover exhibits and masterpieces, cultural level is increasing promptly as they learn plenty of new about history and significance of these things. Moreover, listening to the music or studying art evolve numerous parts of the brain, which affects its condition perfectly. For example, according to the “Cultural development” newspaper, progeny, who are passionate about penciling and note stuff, savvy quicker more than 15% than common students. In other words, mankind should take care of contemplation of adeptness and chime as both of them cultivate students’ fantasy and original intellection.
Secondly, cultural events which are held among pupils in a group, promote the elaboration of communication skills and teamwork. If music is played in orchestra or learning of workmanship is organized in group, students talk to each other as they search the way of achieving the main goal. Furthermore, grown pupils become valuable people in the labor market as they practiced how to interact with team members. For example, according to the “Labor in Russia” web-site, most graduates from music or art schools receive more money than others. Thus, group cultivated events contribute to the development of sociable skills and classwork.
Thirdly, studying art or music research are the best way for world society to take rest from compound and boring everyday life. Today, modern people engaged with sophisticated work, as they want to receive more money than a hundred years ago. Also, jobs are stressful for many of the humankind and doing something creative and peculiar is the only way to relax and gain new impressions, which makes you feel nicely. For example, according to the “I love cultural events” podcasts, humans, who are run mad after the craft or chime, are more optimistic and joyful. Hence, if people want to take rest, they can scrutinize art studies or explore chime.
In conclusion I would like to say that pupils ought to investigate art world and learn about music in secondary school. Both of these subjects teach students how to be a good worker in a squad and show the ways of imagination and thinking extension
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since the beginning of civilization humanity ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, for example, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2213.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31971153846 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84239840434 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588942307692 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.9756834946 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 110.65 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171175553649 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483817886865 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045626462554 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0933138725106 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0212990941688 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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