With the development of our society and the increase in population, our lives are increasingly busy and fast-paced. However, no matter where we live or what we do, it is never acceptable for a person to behave discourteously to others. This is because the basic code that helps maintain a healthy society is etiquette towards others. Some people believe that we should not expect the occupied people to be polite while others disagree. In my view, although nowadays people tend to be less sensitive to being courteous or respectful to one’s space, I firmly disagree with the statement since politeness plays an indispensable role in everyone’s social life. This essay will demonstrate two reasons for this assertion in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the world is becoming ever smaller, such that we cannot avoid communicating with others in our daily lives. So the only way we can get along with the people around us (including colleagues, classmates, teachers, bosses, even strangers), is to be polite to them. And they should be polite to us reciprocally. For example, I always endeavor to behave politely. When I am trying to get into the crowded bus after an exhausting working day, I politely say excuse me to the person standing next to me. If I want to get a copy of my classmate’s notebook, I say “would you” courteously. And above all, at my first meeting with someone that I have not known, I make small talk first instead of jumping right into a business or serious discussion. Discuss her/his day, kids, or talk about the movies or shows we were watching lately. This will help break the ice. These are common ways to show our politeness which is necessary for our daily communication.
Also, politeness plays an irreplaceable role in the development of individuals. We do politely not just for other people around us, but for ourselves as well. People’s behavior reflects one’s psychology and in the meantime, the mind itself is influenced by one’s behavior too. Indeed, everyone has experienced a lot of pressure in such a busy and crowded world and need a way to mitigate them. But being rude is never the choice. As a matter of fact, being rude may make things worse. First, you have to face an unwelcome world when you express your rude freely. The adverse effect would do nothing good for your mood. Second, rudeness can cause hurt we never wanted. The mood needs to be controlled and subjugated rather than licensed. The devil in our mind would not go just because we open the window; furthermore, the rude behavior might lead to irretrievable results we would regret for the rest of our lives. So it is safe to say that the basic code that helps maintain a healthy society and psyche is etiquette towards others.
To recapitulate, we should keep showing behavior that is respectful and considerate of other people. Not only does it help us having beneficent and soothing interactive, but it also helps us promote our mental health. We should all emphasize politeness as a significant incontrovertible manner in our lives.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the busy and crowded world, we should not expect people to be polite to each other. 76
- TOEFL T P O 32 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the busy and crowded world, we should not expect people to be polite to each other. 83
- TOEFL T P O 32 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TOEFL T P O 20 - Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 162, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
.... So the only way we can get along with the people around us including colleagues, classmates, teach...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...necessary for our daily communication. Also, politeness plays an irreplaceable ...
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Line 6, column 126, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to have' or 'have'.
Suggestion: to have; have
... other people. Not only does it help us having beneficent and soothing interactive, bu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, well, while, for example, as a matter of fact, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2579.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95009596929 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9262293894 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531669865643 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 810.0 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.159626758 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1935483871 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8064516129 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29032258065 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33933426695 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774495170234 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732807066376 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205178921487 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619616954961 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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