Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Classmates are more important influence than parents on a child's success in school.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by Mukirisu on Fri, 05/18/2018 - 07:38

In my opinion, I agree that classmates have more influence on the child’s success in school than parents.

For example, on one hand, some African parents have never been to school. This decreases their level of influence on their children’s success in school. Indeed, some children can even stop going to school or be discouraged because most of them take the examples of their parents in life.

Besides, some parents do not encourage their children to go to school because they don’t understand the importance of school.

In addition, some parents work many hours which reduces their time to concentrate on their children’s performance in school. As matter of fact, they come home tired and cannot help their children with school work. Also, some of them cannot teach their children depending on their class levels, the more the children are advanced, the more the subjects get harder.

On the other hand, a child is frequently influenced by class friends. This influence on peers is more visible in adolescence period. At this age, Children want to rebel against their parents or anyone who wants to oppose their thoughts, beliefs. In their mind they see themselves as grown-ups and are most likely to be influenced by the classmates or other friends. Classmates become friends and the more their study together, the more their relationship grow for some of the classmates.
Most of the time, children want to compare their school results to those of their classmates, which create kind of motivation for learning.

In conclusion, Children tend to follow their peers than modeling their parents.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1373.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 263.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22053231939 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72127553598 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 212.727598566 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51711026616 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 390.6 618.680645161 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.3809341615 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.5333333333 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5333333333 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199627665325 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0943489754238 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783297243081 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13670887379 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0993932175058 0.0645574589148 154% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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