Employees, the foundation of a company’s existence, has been valued and even triggered a heated discussion about whether companies are supposed to offer financial supports for employees to obtain university degree. Companies, in some people’s views, should not spend money on employees’ cultivation. Contrary to these people’s opinions is my perspective that companies need to pay for employees’ training expense and help them get university degree, due to the benefit for employees and companies.
What must be prioritized is that companies pay for employees to get university degree, instead of refusing to do that, is benificial to employees, by enabling them to gain more knowledge and cultivate their persistence. What cannot be ignored is that, spend money on training employees can help them gain more knowledge. In detail, comprehensive training makes employees to acquire knowledges in various domains like cultural knowledge, professtional knowledge and language knowledge; on the contrast employees are unable to have such a wide range of knowledge if they do not go through the training. Additionally, takiing part in training can cultivate employees’ persistence. To be more specific, employees will confront a few of difficulties when studying courses and finishing assignments, and it is addressing these challenges that cultivates employees’ persistence; nevertheless, employees will not face these challenges if they just devote time to work and not undertake the training.
What is equally worth discussing is that companies offering their employees a free training program, rather than saving the expense does good to companies themselves since that increases the effiency of companies and attracts more candidates. Firstly, spending money on employees’ training programs can take companies’ operate effiency to a higher level. To explain it further, when employees apply the advanced knowledge and technique from training to work, they can easily avoid making mistakes and the entire company can thus make progress more efficiently; on the other hand, if they do not update their knowledge and technique through training program, their error rate will increase as time goes by. Moreover, more candidates will be attracted if companies are will to pay for employees to get university degree. Specifically, when potential candidates are making a choice between different companies, they will prefer a company work in which can they improve their capacity and even get a higher degree; however, a company which does not willing to spend money on employees’ abilities is not attractive for potential candidates.
Employees, the source of companies’ profits, will be benefited when their companies invest on their development. Development, the core of a company’s profit, will be improved when it spend money on employees’ training program. As a result, only when a company pay for employees to get university degree can it maxmize its profit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'spends'?
Suggestion: spends
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2548.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63716814159 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11672508453 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471238938053 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.9 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.5316760863 48.9658058833 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.25 100.406767564 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.25 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271656790985 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124798052023 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848181862389 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20648623066 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450073254681 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 11.7677419355 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 58.1214874552 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.73 10.9000537634 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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