Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays education of children is a matter of great concern to the parents since it directly affects the future of their children. In recent years, technology has improved in a rapid pace and provided the human with a vast number of modern devices. Although, many parents believe that these new advents are an obstacle to the education of children, I firmly believe that parents and children can take advantage of these new innovations in technology.
First of all, students can benefit from cell phones to strengthen their academic background. A vast amount of course materials and a wide assortment of online classes are available in the World Wide Web that can boost the academic performance of students. Indeed, parents are responsible to guide their child through using these online materials. For instance, I remember when I was at elementary school, I had problem in adapting to the teaching method of my teacher. My parents helped me to overcome my problem by providing me with a smartphone and an internet access by which I downloaded some electronic books written by adept mathematics teachers. In this way, I learnt new methods for solving mathematical problems and passed the school exams. As a result, modern technology can ease the process of learning for children and help them to have access to a lot of useful academic materials.
Furthermore, children can get rid of stress or exhaustion caused by studying through video games and other modern entertainments. Playing video games helps children relax after taking an exam and recovers their mind to function better in further studies. A recent research conducted in the University of Tehran’s faculty of psychology revealed that students who play video games in their free times are more prone to achieve good results in school than others. The researchers studied a group of students who were used to attend a game club after every exam. They didn’t show any signs of stress or exhaustion before exams. This happened because they used to take pleasure of playing games with friends and in this way, they would boost their energy to succeed in later exams. Consequently, results of the research proved that playing video games in a limited time not only helps the students to alleviate stress but also boosts their academic performance.
It is fair to conclude that children can take advantage of modern advents and entertainments to improve their academic performance.
- Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole 80
- When teachers assign projects on which students must work together the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects 73
- Because the world is changing so quickly people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past 81
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone online games and social networking Web site Use specific reasons and examples to 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, so, then, for instance, of course, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12219451372 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75078056901 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538653366584 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.867652932 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.111111111 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2777777778 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142857575632 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452600730295 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0255712811877 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.075083970594 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348897223631 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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