Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern life, thanks to the technological breacktroughs in every section of science, realishanships between people has altered dramatically. Some people are of the opinion that nowadays the priories in the the life of youghts is not their families anymore, while others beilive that developing first years of life in the family, individuals tend to have strong relationship with families. I personally, sibeciribe to the view that extended familiys are not as important as it was in the past; we are thought to be independent, having less contacte with our families in the small scale and in the larg escale our qualitis and abilities are misured by our capabilities, nor do like the past age by families and reletives. In the following paragraphs, my reasons will be elaborated on in more detail.
To commence, it is undenable that the way of our life moderated during the lase decades. In fact, after the 18 years old, or in the other word, in the beginig of the adulthood, people are encouraged to decide importand decisions such as future career, the city or country for living, and finding a pruse. especially, going to college and finding a job make independency during the firs years after becoming adult. Enormous reasons address to keep distances between a person and its families ranging from besy routinelife to make a new friends, which would be a replacment of traditional families. To delve more into it, many TV programs and seris based on the real way of life, demonstrate that young people come to big cities, where they dreams would become true. they find job, make new friends, and spend most of their times with them. Therefore, in my opinion, they chose a new family for themselves; while in an other point of view, most of these seris illustrate a point that either grandparents, cousins and uncles are related to the chilhood or the time that ones lived with parents. it means, as a mater of fact, nither have childern or fimilies seriuce emotional feelings about each other.
Another reason why I beilive the extended family is not important as the past time is that societies are envolved to the way that choose a individual based on their meriets not their families. generally speaking, In contrast, in the past time, fathers and grandfathers played a crutial role to future life of inscedentens. As a case in point, if a father had power and money, their children, especificly first son, would take the power and money too, without any efforts or especial capability, they benefitted from reletives. Indeed family was a strong institution during past ages, most of the important happend had been limitted to relationships. For instance, the mariage did take a plce between two cousions; moreover, for fining a job, young people first were seeking between relatives then ask strangers. However, todays just as independency is ideidified as a worth gole in the life and become a desirable attitutde for our generation, so do we attempt to foster our abilities for achivieng succes and welfare.
Drawing upon the reasions that I mentioned above, I enhance to the fact that relationship between people in the extended families has changed. Not only is this practice less important than the past, but also the meaning of the family as a strong and powerful object has altered, hence increasing independency and meriotocracy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, in contrast, in fact, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2803.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 562.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98754448399 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82161132735 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 212.727598566 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524911032028 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 893.7 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.754293973 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.15 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157193256028 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454317969077 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521200528485 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109313287148 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407118139268 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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