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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The extended family grandparents cousins aunts and uncles is less important now than it was in the past

In these days, with the advancements and technologies and growth of populations, people tend to have less kids and as a result the number of families declined, whereas we had more persons in families in the past. Some people believe that having grandparents and a lot of cousins and uncles is better for them since they can have more close relatives that support them, while others disagree with this notion and think that it is less important to have more family members now than in the past. I am of the opinion of the latter. I will elaborate on why I feel this way in the following paragraphs.
First of all, the societies became so complex now and people are adapted to its circumstances, which leads to having less kids in the family. Additionally, the expenses are so high and burdensome, so that people prefer to have one or two kids. As a result, the number of families declined and kids find themselves in a situation that they have fewer cousins and aunts than in the past. Moreover, children adapted to this and they can make friends with other peoples and get help from them whenever possible. In this way, people can substitute their relatives with other people and talk to them. For example, I have only one aunt and no uncle and few cousins, but I could find friends that even we can talk whenever I am in need of help or trouble. They help me in my hard times, so they are close to me and they are like my own family. Hence, we can get support from other people and substitute them to our kinfolk.
Second of all, with the advancements of technologies and having big cities, it is easier to participate in different activities and have social life and make friends that have more common characteristics. In this way, people can attend universities and have a life and broaden their circle of people that is more close to them instead of just being relatives. For example, I have friends that have more common things to share with than my close relatives and I spend most of my times with them instead of the family members. In addition, I enjoy spending my time with my friends than family.
To put it all in a nutshell, I believe that nowadays it is less important to have extended families because societies are so complex now and people adapted to its situations and have less kids, so they can make friends. Also, close friends have more common things and they can fill the gap of the relatives even better.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 102, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun kids is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...wth of populations, people tend to have less kids and as a result the number of fami...
^^^^
Line 2, column 118, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun kids is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ts circumstances, which leads to having less kids in the family. Additionally, the e...
^^^^
Line 4, column 184, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun kids is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ople adapted to its situations and have less kids, so they can make friends. Also, c...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, whereas, while, for example, i feel, in addition, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5444191344 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51621110614 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.410022779043 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4709315118 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.833333333 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3888888889 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171938126686 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605082764732 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677795697176 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128721221493 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070295467638 0.0645574589148 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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