It is significantly imperative that everyone should have privacy for him/herself. Famous celebrities are no exception. Some people believe that famous entertainers and athletes have privacy now, while others disagree with this notion and state that famous people need more privacy. I am of the latter opinion. I will elaborate on why I feel this way in the following paragraphs.
First of all, people are interested in private lives of actors, actresses and famous people and want to know everything they do, but everyone should have their own privacy including famous individuals. We do not like when other people sneak in our private lives and we should expect the same for famous people. For example, when we make a mistake, like anyone that can make mistakes, we do not want to see our stories on the newspapers or magazines. As a result, we should respect to private lives of celebrities like we expect from other people to respect to our private life. We should follow the things that they openly discuss about them in TV or other sources and give them space to live their life.
Second of all, famous celebrities are humans after all, and want to live their own life. They can make mistakes like anyone else, but paparazzi's see them as a chance for their magazines and articles to make money out of it. They are after famous people all the time to get something and do not respect private lives of these persons. There should be strict rules about these inconveniencies for famous guys, so that they can enjoy their life and have their privacy they deserve. They have the right to live a normal life and stay away from these paparazzi's. For instance, I remember that a fan of a famous person went near her bedroom and it was really scary for her. As a result, she asked the local securities to protect her from any future coincidences. So, famous people need more privacy than now.
To put it all in a nutshell, for the aforementioned reasons, I strongly believe that famous persons should have more privacy than they have now, because not only they have this right to keep their private things for themselves, but they need to stay away from the controversial articles and magazines and live a normal life.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 83, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: Celebrities
...ne should have privacy for him/herself. Famous celebrities are no exception. Some people believe t...
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Line 3, column 16, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...ace to live their life. Second of all, famous celebrities are humans after all, and want to live ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, so, while, after all, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73643410853 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50824678577 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.0815810223 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4736842105 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3684210526 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2192322351 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794248742518 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780125555548 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175061639549 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641531163457 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 83, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: Celebrities
...ne should have privacy for him/herself. Famous celebrities are no exception. Some people believe t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 16, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...ace to live their life. Second of all, famous celebrities are humans after all, and want to live ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, so, while, after all, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73643410853 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50824678577 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.0815810223 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4736842105 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3684210526 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2192322351 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794248742518 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780125555548 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175061639549 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641531163457 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.