Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The relationships between family members have changed compared to the past. In my opinion, I agree with the statement that the extended family now, such as grandparents, aunts and uncles, is less important than it was in the earlier generations. I feel this way for many reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, thanks to the advancements in technology and transportation, people today are able to live farther away from each other than they did in the old days. Means of transit in the past were limited and costly. It took many hours, if not days, to travel from one city to the other. Hence, individuals lived in close proximity to each other, sometimes even in the same house. As a result, the extended family members had to interact with each other on a daily basis. Therefore, family connections were important between children and their grandparents and other distant relatives. Nowadays, on the other hand, commuting became faster, cheaper and more efficient, which enabled people to reside away from each other even though they belong to the same family.Furthermore, most people prefer privacy and want to have their own house or apartment. Consequently, some family members may settle away from their origins and their communication with other family members becomes less important.
Secondly, modern generations have more responsibilities and obligations than older generations and as a consequence, they have less free time than their parents or grandparents. This is mainly due to the fierce competition that leads people to immerse themselves in working or studying. School, career and other activities do not leave any time to engage in a conversation with our distant relatives. Besides, most people barely have time to take care of their immediate family. Although communication is much easier now through smartphones which are almost available to all the planet dwellers, time constraints makes it hard for people to reach out and call or contact their distant family members.
To conclude, I am of the view that nuclear family today is more important to most individuals than extended family. This is because people end up pursuing their own lives in different towns and cities and they are busier than they were in the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: proximity
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Suggestion: Furthermore
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Suggestion:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, i feel, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1923.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16935483871 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86849370869 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540322580645 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2885807514 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.833333333 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.45110844103 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180540690091 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634592278684 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778393515594 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14020535222 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0858548733378 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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