Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Family, bonding between members, is one of the key element in any individual life--either may be a single or a extended family. Unless, there is a family, a person has life like a solitary. I am not in consonant with the speakers' claim, and disagree the statement that extended family-grandparents, cousins, aunts and uncles is less important at present instant than past. These can be explained by giving of the following reasons.
First of all, wherever there is joint or extended family, there is a co-operation, and a sympathetic views, and it would be really helpful at the time of hardship. In the life of human beings, everyday might not be the same case-- days may be pleasant or unpleasant. It would be better to share joy, happiness, sorrows, and other different forms of sentiments. My personal experience is a compelling example for this case. Just before one month ago, I have been sick and admitted to the hospital. During that period, my mother and father have went to foreign countries for their own businesses. It was a critical situation for me. However, due to my extended family, sometimes my uncle or cousins or grandparents lives me with me in the hospital for my take care. Unless, there would not be a extended family, it would be a great hardship for me. Consequently, I got a proper care and ,management due to my other members of my family. In this situation, the extended family really helps a lot. In the absence of somebody, there is presence of somebody. It was the real advantage of the joint types of family.
Second--in the joint family, there requires a less amount of materials and utilities in comparision to the small family. The daily necessities and needs can be better and easily fulfilled in the case of the extended type of family. For instances, I have a extended family; and one of my friend has a small family. If we compared between me and my friend, then his family would required a more utilities and money in relation to the per-capita. His uncle and aunts being one family, grandparents become other and his one equals to three family. When these scenario arises and it is the scattered case, and each and every family requires separate houses--kitchen, toilet and bathroom, rooms; and finally these all increases the expenses of the family. Thus, to be a more economical, these extended family would helps a lot.
In conclusion, joint types of family would be important in the past as well as in present because it creates an opportunity to share the sentiment, sympathy, empathy, and because this types of family would helps to become a economical by decreasing the money per-capita.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ividual life--either may be a single or a extended family. Unless, there is a fam...
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Line 3, column 544, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[6]
Message: Note: went is a past participle of "wend". Did you mean 'gone' (past participle of "go")?
Suggestion: gone
... that period, my mother and father have went to foreign countries for their own busi...
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Line 3, column 792, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...y take care. Unless, there would not be a extended family, it would be a great ha...
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Line 3, column 885, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e. Consequently, I got a proper care and ,management due to my other members of my...
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Line 5, column 255, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...d type of family. For instances, I have a extended family; and one of my friend h...
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Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'require'
Suggestion: require
...me and my friend, then his family would required a more utilities and money in relation ...
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Line 5, column 550, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this scenario' or 'these scenarios'?
Suggestion: this scenario; these scenarios
...nd his one equals to three family. When these scenario arises and it is the scattered case, an...
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Line 5, column 810, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'help'
Suggestion: help
...economical, these extended family would helps a lot. In conclusion, joint types of ...
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Line 7, column 207, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'help'
Suggestion: help
... and because this types of family would helps to become a economical by decreasing th...
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Line 7, column 223, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...s types of family would helps to become a economical by decreasing the money per-...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, then, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82158590308 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87483329925 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469162995595 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0312209929 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.56 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.16 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.56 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128725087053 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0414986510799 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693674592808 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102245015436 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679756028748 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.