Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is no secret that famous athletes and entertainers are always in front of people's eyes and people follow their life so there is less privacy for them specially in public situations. The controversial question which arises here is whether they require to have more privacy than they have now. I am of the oppinion that they need more privacy. To support this, there are several reasons tow of which are going to aptly explored in the following.
The first remarkable point to be mentioned is that renowned people are such other humans besides their famousness and they need to have some spent times with their family or solitude without being under any observation of other people. they also want to do some kind of activities like others and have fun time. As an illustration, take the example of a well-knowen soccer player who goes to a park to spend his lesure time be out of his professional life. He wants to join some people whom are playing football but because his situation and the reaction of other people he prefer to stay his place and just watch them.
Another worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that famous people always are in the difficulty of their situation for doing some volenteer work such as helping poor people, because they attract journalists and reporter by doing this work while it is not their desire that all people be aware of their help.To prevent this they are forced to employ others to do instead of themselves, so they are out from the good feeling which they may sense when they do themselves.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that famous people deserve more privacy for their lifes. there many other reasons to support my view point but let's suffice these.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: They
... under any observation of other people. they also want to do some kind of activities...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'prefers'.
Suggestion: prefers
...ion and the reaction of other people he prefer to stay his place and just watch them. ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
... that all people be aware of their help.To prevent this they are forced to employ ...
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Suggestion: There
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Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...er reasons to support my view point but lets suffice these.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, so, well, while, in short, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1434.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73267326733 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45354179367 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564356435644 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 110.332779871 48.9658058833 225% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 130.363636364 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5454545455 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250085355855 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102576389741 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737307636242 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164409565966 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0793001712004 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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