Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Nowadays people never stop debating whether celebrities should have more privacy or not. It is established beyond doubt that there are distinctive points of view about that issue. Although it seems plausible at first glimpse that famous entertainers and athletes do not deserve more private lives, I would counter this viewpoint due to some reasons. I will enlarge on that issue in this essay.
Above all, everybody's life is his/her affair and it is non-of our business. To be more exact, there is no benefit for us in their life and it is superior to spend our time on our way of life to improve it since search for their private lives can make them nervous so they won’t be able to concentrate on their profession. One person who was a famous actor in my country is a compelling example of that. I believe that he was so talented and played some fascinating action movies here, but some private videos from him were posted on a web page at one time. Afterwards, he could not focus on his plays, so he lost all his roles and even opportunities. As a result, revealing their private lives can be so detrimental for them.
The second reason which deserves some words is that talking about famous entertainers and athletes private lives, is not only harmful for them, but also can break the societies down. To clarify this point, it can lead to some belief that there is no privacy in the communities. Hence, the trust will disappear in those societies which will result in rupture of them. For instance, showing some private film of some celebrities in our community cause the belief that we should have everything under the eagle eyes. Consequently, we should put more energy on some trivial things than ever, so our society is always sick to death of nothing!
Another subtle point which I should deem lies on the fact that they should have more privacy to do some entertainments which let their brain be free of the pressure of their works since they supposed to be a role model in the society which is really difficult. In other words, they have a very challenging career, so they need to do some things to get rid of its pressure.
To sum up, given the facts that celebrities private lives are their affair and talking about that can lead to rupture of the communities. In addition, they have to be free of their career’s pressure, I am of the opinion that they must have more privacy than they have nowadays.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, really, second, so, for instance, in addition, talking about, as a result, in other words, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1992.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63255813953 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50391148846 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509302325581 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.6775743413 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.666666667 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8888888889 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94444444444 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192409693921 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060701185804 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756456296289 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133325912635 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619441478686 0.0645574589148 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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