Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
To begin with, protecting the privacy of famous celebrities and athletes is crucial for the safety of the celebrities and their fans as well. These enthusiastic fans could cluster in groups to meet their idols. Thus, creating too many stampedes which might endanger their lives and the life of the celebrity if the crowd gets out of control. For example, a famous Turkish Tv star named “ Jan Yaman” travels across the world. Whenever he arrives at any international airport, his loyal fans block the airport and create traffic that could endanger their lives in case of emergency. Also, it encroaches on the safety of the TV star. If there are some rules that protect the privacy of celebrities, there won’t be chaos that might disturb their personal lives. Also, there won’t be any danger to their fans as well.
In addition, famous entertainers and athletes deserve more privacy because they are humans who make mistakes. However, many young adults and teenagers look up to them as their idols. So, they imitate their idols without thinking and this could enhance bad behavior. Because these young people are not mature enough to differentiate between the right behavior and the wrong one. Also, they are not aware of the bad consequences of this bad behavior. For instance, a famous celebrity could be a drug abuser, or a glorious athlete might commit adultery secretly. Therefore, protecting these celebrities’ private life is inevitable for the protection of our youth from imitating negative behaviors. Obviously, No one is perfect and we all have our flaws, but our daily life is not always on spot like celebrities. If a celebrity’s life isn’t always exposed, youth and teenagers will probably copy their good behavior.
To sum up, Famous entertainers and athletes deserve more privacy for their safety and their fans’ safety and to be good idols to the youth.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 42, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...o begin with, protecting the privacy of famous celebrities and athletes is crucial for the safety ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 465, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
...s of this bad behavior. For instance, a famous celebrity could be a drug abuser, or a glorious a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05448717949 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63762967811 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551282051282 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.130797343 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6111111111 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114819949571 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0393092940529 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618056627907 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979749776835 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397114927979 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 42, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...o begin with, protecting the privacy of famous celebrities and athletes is crucial for the safety ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 465, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
...s of this bad behavior. For instance, a famous celebrity could be a drug abuser, or a glorious a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05448717949 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63762967811 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551282051282 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.130797343 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6111111111 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114819949571 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0393092940529 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618056627907 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979749776835 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397114927979 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.