Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, the celebrities and famous people such as entertainers and athletes have a pivotal role in each society. There are a plethora of people who have the conviction that the people should become aware of all aspects of these peoples life since they are the symbol of the county. Others, on the other hand, take a different point of view and allege that these persons deserve to have more privacy that they have now. I, completely, support the later viewpoint on account of many reasons, in the hereunder, I will elaborate on more significant ones.
The first and most exquisite reason which coming to the mind to substantiate my viewpoint is that the celebrities same as other peoples are a human being so, it is indispensable for them to have more time in solitude without being distracted by the presence of other. As a matter of fact, they are in need of some time to encounter with the challenge in their personal life, concentrate on their works, spend some time with their family, to name but a few. Admittedly, being aware of the fact that they are controlled by others not only do not help them for coping with the mentioned challenges, but also bring about some harmful problem such as stress and psychological disease for them which, in turn, will be influenced on their action as athletes or entertainers.
The other equally important reason, If not more, is that it is better for the society to do not know anything about some aspects of these peoples life. It is beyond doubt that, some people, especially the youngsters opt the celebrities as a role model. On the other hand, some celebrities do a work that has a bad influence on the behavior of young people. As a matter of fact, if the youngsters, who choose the celebrities as a role model, see some disturbing from these persons, they will try to repeat that in the society no matter how that action is bad or has a negative outcome.
To make a long story short, by taking all the aforementioned reasons into consideration, I strongly support this idea that the famous people deserve to have some time in which anyone cannot become aware from it. I hope the people understand this important fact and let the celebrities some time to live in the way that is more welcoming to them.
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- Essay topics: TPO-34 - Integrated Writing Task 75
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ld become aware of all aspects of these peoples life since they are the symbol of the c...
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Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ow anything about some aspects of these peoples life. It is beyond doubt that, some peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, such as, as a matter of fact, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1863.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64588528678 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63672994896 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481296758105 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.4396513377 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.307692308 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8461538462 20.6045352989 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69230769231 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192187046906 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773335162474 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657518140875 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125857090163 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722901901111 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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