Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the nowadays competitive and sophisticated world, job selection for children is a tough choice. In this respect, while most people are on the same opinion that kids should continue their family job, others stay on the other side of continuum, and believing that they should different works than their parents. As much as I concerned, I assumed that it would be quite beneficial for children to take the same job as their parents. In what follows, the reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated.
To begin with, children, who want to follow same job to the parents, have more relief life than others due to a great opportunity given to them by the government, which are entitle to possession of their retired parents’ jobs. In fact, one of the most stressful issues that school children are facing is whether they can get a suitable job in the future. At this vein, this thought not only reduces their performance at school by straining their minds but also eliminates the joy of their lives. Therefore, thanks to the constitution, it counts as an amazing chance for teenagers to be able to inherit their parents’ jobs. Due to the age difference between parents and children, they will have a occupation after their graduation. Under this circumstance, all attention of them will be on learning the courses and acquisition of required skills for their prospective jobs. Consequently, children who will be pursuing their parents’ jobs have more convenient life.
Furthermore, it is crystal clear that if youth age people do jobs similar to their parents, they will benefit from parents’ experiences to become prosperous. Actually, one of the attractive aspects of taking family job for children is that they will not start from scratch. Parents teach them all of the prerequisites for work and familiarize with its following challenges. Therefore, kids rather than facing with exhausting problems can be promoted quickly in their careers. A personal example can drive this notion home. My father is a retired electrical engineer and because of his daily stories about the fascinated challenges of this field, I wanted to go the same way as him. Therefore, I got a Master of Science degree from Technical University of Munich. All of my classmates, including me, were afraid of the real business world because during our academic education we just learned about the theoretical matters and had no practical work experience. But I always discussed with my father the potential challenges of real work and how to use what I learned from university to solved it. Therefore, when I was hired as an engineer in a company I totally was ready for all new problems. At first year, while I received the award of best employee of the year, my former classmates were involved with trivial problems. Thus, following a job same to my father help me to use his valuable experiences in my career.
To bring everything in conclusion, I strongly believe that taking a job similar to parents definitely is better for kids. It stands to reasons that children will have quit life and besides they could utilize parents’ experiences in facing problems.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents job Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents job Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents job Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 174, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'entitled'.
Suggestion: entitled
...en to them by the government, which are entitle to possession of their retired parents’...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 694, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...en parents and children, they will have a occupation after their graduation. Und...
^
Line 3, column 294, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... start from scratch. Parents teach them all of the prerequisites for work and familiarize ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1237, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the best'.
Suggestion: of the best
... first year, while I received the award of best employee of the year, my former classma...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2630.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 526.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82704158437 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507604562738 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 805.5 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2707353945 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.2 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.04 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.32 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361013700295 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104282712375 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728228955916 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238450216154 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288779219765 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.