Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Currently, there is a trend that explosive information starts to affect people's everyday life, thus resulting a drastic debate on whether it is important for people to know about events around the world, even they are unrelated to people's daily life. From my perspective, I suggest that making aware of events over the world is necessary for every people.
To begin with, knowing events happening around the world would influence children's future directly or indirectly. More specifically, children nowadays always spend most of their time at school, which indicates that they rarely have time to get familiar with the society, which changes frequently and is closely related to children's future. In this case, knowing events around the world previously in children's early age enables them to know the trend in the society and make decisions about their future early. Take my classmate as an example. He is a talented boy who always spent a lot of time reading newspapers at the university. As a result, after his graduation, he quickly found a suitable job which not only earns much money but fits the trend in the society as well.
In spite of this, adults who know events around the world even unrelated to their life often acquire more advantages than other people. The fact that the society always changes rapidly indicates that workers who do not plan their career properly or even go reversely against the society trend would be eliminated by the whole world. Consequently, being aware of most of events happening around the world facilitate adults to maintain their job and their position in the society. This point could be better illustrated by the example of my father, a common worker in a small IT company. By scanning various information from the Internet and newspapers every day, he noticed that the environment protection had gradually become a significant part in people's life. Then he suggested several friends to establish a company to sell the refrigerators which use less electricity. After several years, his company acquired great success and he earned much more money than his colleagues in the IT company.
Admittedly, it is reasonable that few people thinks that knowing the events which would affect people's daily life is sufficient. Because they want to concentrate more on their work and family. However, I consider them as short-sight people since knowing most of events happening around the world, whether they are related or unrelated to people's daily life would make sure that those people could concentrate on their work and family permanently without disturbing by the changes in the society.
In general, according to what have been mentioned above, I insist that being aware of events happening around the world, whether they are close related to people's daily life or not, would benefit most people. This is because this would enable people to make considerate plan about their future. Otherwise, people would be eliminated by the society gradually.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the events') or simply say ''most events''.
Suggestion: most of the events; most events
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Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
Suggestion: companies
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: the; IT
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Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
Suggestion: companies
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the events') or simply say ''most events''.
Suggestion: most of the events; most events
...hem as short-sight people since knowing most of events happening around the world, whether the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, so, then, thus, well, in general, as a result, in spite of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2512.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13701431493 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60080252739 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470347648262 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 792.0 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1396198026 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.619047619 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2857142857 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221318660424 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701780068653 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682169359436 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142981464461 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385213320437 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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