By and large, the importance of family members in successfulness is undeniable. There are a plethora of people who are in the conviction that nowadays it's much easier to become successful without the help of family members than in the past. While others take a radically different point of view. To the extent which my personal perspective is concerned I accord with the first group. Among countless reasons which give adherence to my opinion, I will delve into the most important ones in what follows.
Firstly, the ridiculous aristocracy of old times has been destroyed and been replaced by the laws of equality. In the past the heretic structure of nobles didn't left any room for independent individuals, no matter how innovative, to flourish properly. The new government's structures not only has dwindled those borders but also, has provided the majority of people with the equal opportunities such as educational ones. For instance my father was deprived from proper education until he was 15 because there was no one to support him with the kind of money that was needed in those days to receive proper education. It was only then that my uncle provided him the chance of becoming a doctor through his newly earned wealth. If it wasn't for his brother, my father never could have been a doctor. in the contrast my friend, that was from a poor family, easily went to the university and became a doctor since the free entrance exam of medicine provided by government, allowed him to take his chance.
Secondly, the development of internet and new technologies have provided a suitable bed for people to achieve success. Gone are the days where a writer had to suffocate the divine talents he possessed in order to avoid the conflict that his writings could raise in his village. For example as my brother turned 18, he showed us the draft of his newly written story. My father asked him to stop writing sci-fi stories and to get involved in classic forms. Everyone mocked him but it wasn't long after, when a famous publisher, to whom he had sent the stories, agreed to publish his book. He reached the fame and success, which he only dreamed about, in less than 6 months, without the help of any other being.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that it's much easier nowadays to achieve success without the help of family members.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- It is better to take a secure job with a low pay than to take a job with a high pay but is easy to lose 70
- The personal and work-related challenges that young people face today are not very different from the challenges their parents and grandparents faced in the past 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Government should focus its budgets more on environmental protection than on economy.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 88
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...elp of family members than in the past. While others take a radically different point...
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...he past the heretic structure of nobles didnt left any room for independent individua...
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Suggestion: structure
... flourish properly. The new governments structures not only has dwindled those borders but...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in short, kind of, such as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1961.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79462102689 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61522045964 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569682151589 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2924214261 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.210526316 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5263157895 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20516116755 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665852321105 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940951474102 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153092131034 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0760021975427 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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