Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It's necessary to put a lot of money into a business to make it successful.
How much money to put in business has been a debatable issue. Many businessman state that it is crucial for entrepreneurs to invest a lot of money into work. Personally, I strongly agree with this statement.
On one hand, what draws much of my attention is business success. It cannot be denied that, sinking money into business creates chances for boss to reward their employee more regularly. As a result workers to become more motivate. Therefore they are more likely to be focused and concentrated on their work. This creates more opportunity for workers to give their best effort at work consistently. Consequently, businesses are bound to take off and set the first foundation for success in the near future. More importantly, it is common knowledge that only by investing a lot of money into business can one establish their business into wider fields. Take an example of the famous company Google. By earning a lot of fortune from their search tool, Google expand its business into electronic map, electronic mail and social network and become one of the largest tech company around the world. By expanding into many field, young businessman possess chances to meet and get to know with many people. As a consequence, they are able to make many new acquaintances and friends. This would help widened their social network which will help provide them with more opportunity to gain support in finance or idea. Thus early start-up ideas could be blossomed. Without doubt business success is heavily relied on finance.
On the other hand, some people might say that spend a lot of money on business is too risky which leads to the collapse of some early business. However that is not necessarily the case, young entrepreneurs tend to carefully evaluate their business plan. Therefore they have a tendency to divide their money into many small investments. This greatly reduces the odds of failing for early business. Besides, even if investing a great fortune into business is too risky, many businessmen already possess the audacity to follow their idea. Because of this reason, they acquire the ability to withstand many hardships in their business. This eliminates their fear and makes them courageous. This strong mindset will provide them willingness to take bold risks. Hence they are more likely to win bigger. Certainly, investing isn’t stressful.
In conclusion, business success is the convincing reason for my agreement. It is highly recommend that young businessman should take my writing into great consideration.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2140.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1690821256 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71389361586 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533816425121 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3781015201 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.7931034483 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.275862069 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20702728427 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543934659377 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564572446997 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149854606275 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.083178296465 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.11 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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