Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It's necessary to put a lot of money into a business to make it successful.
In today’s opening market, there are thousands of different business but a few successful ones. As we all know, money and funds are a crucial factor for a business’s success, and without it, people cannot even start a new business. According to my perspective, however, a huge amount of money is not a necessary element for the success of a business.
First of all, it is hard for people to gather a lot of money at the beginning of the business. Most people want to establish their own business without money. Several poor young pals gather together for the same target. Lots of successful forerunners, like Zuckerberg, Jack Ma and Ma Huateng, establish company form stretch. By earning money and foundation during the rapid development of businesses, they expand their businesses and become eminent businessmen in the world. In this case, there is no such abandon foundation for business at the most time but numerous top businesses constantly come up. Thus, the rich foundation is not dispensable.
Secondly, a big deal of money cannot absolutely help businesses pave a way to success. Governments and senior generation sometimes are willing to finance the young to start businesses. With the generous financial aid, just few business can really make profits or only pay back their debts. They can skip some hard developing periods to a big size directly, which means they lose the chances to try their products or ideas on a smaller scale. This kind of business tends to lose a great quantity of foundation if the market tells they are wrong. Therefore, a large number of money is actually risky.
In addition, lots of features are more important for businesses to obtain great achievement than money. If Jack Ma has no such ambition that to change the Chinese people’s lifestyle, he will probably sell Ali when the price is suitable. If Ma Huateng has not worked so hard till now, WeChat, an upgrade app from QQ, would not come up, and his company would be easily replaced by other more novel cooperation. If Z could not gain the brilliant idea of establishing an on-campus social media, Facebook can be so prevailing, neither. All those elements, as well as luck, are necessary for the success of businesses.
In conclusion, people who can combine all the resources have opportunities to set up a successful business. It is a difficult process fulling with uncertainties, so the people who make it are respectful.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are sometimes
...cess. Governments and senior generation sometimes are willing to finance the young to start b...
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Line 5, column 557, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...market tells they are wrong. Therefore, a large number of money is actually risky. In addition...
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Line 7, column 415, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...placed by other more novel cooperation. If Z could not gain the brilliant idea of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2040.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98777506112 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90084997301 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577017114914 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5697086277 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6956521739 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7826086957 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47826086957 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168556342156 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507137338178 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399445130519 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0940708754823 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292698221601 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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