It is undeniable that we have more access to various forms of knowledge through fast-developing technologies. Some people argue that personal experience is more significant for acquiring knowledge, while others claim that knowledge from books is more vital. I think both are equally essential based on the following reasons.
First, the information gained from real experiences is more beneficial because it is more accurate than what we merely gain from books. For example, when my brother got his first job, he started some investments by using his salary. In the beginning, he bought a large number of financial books, which include some methods of investment from successful investors in the stock market. He was motivated by those stories and he tried to recreate their stories in his life. Sadly, he lost all his money after he bought one stock that one famous investor recommends in his book. Now, he turns to earn some money back because he learned from the failures of his own investing experience from the last five years. Therefore, we should notice that the knowledge relevant to real-life problems from books may not always be useful and accurate for our own life.
Second, there is much knowledge that we may not always get a chance to experience, such as some information about history and art. Books play a crucial role in this abstract knowledge, which enables us to know other beautiful things in this world. Take my personal story as an example. I am obsessed with the Middle Ages history, which is impossible for me to experience as we are now living in modern times. If I were a living person in the Middle Ages, I could have the precious chance to witness the rise and fall of many great kingdoms. But since I can’t, I can only read and imagine all those fascinating stories and pictures from various books. Also, I am immersed in all information of paintings and painters in the Renaissance period, which cannot also be realized just by personal experience. Thus, the knowledge present in books is invaluable because they are indispensable and unique, which cannot be obtained from other resources like personal life experience.
In conclusion, the knowledge we obtain, whether from our real-life experiences or old stories about history and art from books, is precious and important. In that case, we must take advantage of both resources in order to acquire abundant knowledge of all sorts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1975.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87654320988 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6227336694 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516049382716 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 405.0 20.1344086022 2011% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1975.0 100.406767564 1967% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 405.0 20.6045352989 1966% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 107.0 5.45110844103 1963% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322303315028 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.322303315028 0.076458572812 422% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203559379553 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0143499604667 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 204.1 11.7677419355 1734% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -339.6 58.1214874552 -584% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 161.2 10.1575268817 1587% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.5 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 26.8 8.01818996416 334% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 58.0 10.002688172 580% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 164.0 10.0537634409 1631% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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