According to a research I've read before, the average amount of advertisements approached by a person is about three thousands. It is inevitably for merchandiser sellers of all kinds of services to fight for the attention of potential customers. As a result, I personally believe that professional creator of advertisements will look for every single way to create a best image for their products, and it is sometimes too exaggerated that disappoints the buyers eventually. I feel this way for two reason, which I will be explore in the following essay.
First of all, the society today is shaped by the advanced technology, and people are easily distracted by all kinds of devices and screens. Therefore, advertisements creators have to be more careful and sensitive about the trends and how to the eyeballs of target audience. It is not rare that some impressive advertisements turned out to upset people who tempted by ads and buys the product. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Once a new advertisement of a famous fast food chain stores had a new series of ads on TV, each short clips illustrate a different ingredients of the products in its stores. It presented a couple well treated farmland of cow, chicken, pigs and vegetables. The strong emphasis on the freshness and safety of the ingredients soon created a reliable image of that store. However, the news states the store that it used the oil of poor quality to make meals for us, and it cracked the well-built image.
Secondly, people especially the younger generation will be easily influenced by celebrities because of social media. Sometimes they are too obsessed with someone that they think everything the famous person own must be something fabulous. In this way, advertisements that feature celebrities have the advantages of tempting fans of them buying the product without much effort. For instance, KPOP stars have brought such a craze among teenagers. Many products feature KPOP stars had been sold out due to their fans. Even the simplest coffee can sold out just because it printed the pictures of KPOP members on it. As for the taste, fans do not care about it that much as long as they can appreciate the nice-looking pictures on the cans.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that most advertisements make products seem much better than they actually are.This is because merchandisers sometimes have their actions speak louder than their words to create a better image. And also because the influence of celebrities makes the product with normal quality be out of stock, which causes an illusion for others that it is an amazing product.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as for, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2205.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98868778281 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8871482093 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549773755656 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8018059241 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0476190476 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.19047619048 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171534727585 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.043300400868 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453570756589 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105449076859 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565495531939 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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