Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
In today progressive and sophisticated world where we live, there are an immense variety of factors affecting youngsters' behaviors positively or negatively, one of which is being exposed to media, especially television. In this line of thought, many people believe that negative influences of watching television programs outweigh the positive consequences, while many others hold the opposite view, stating that exposure to media, in particular television, provides individuals with a plethora of benefits. I, personally, concur with the former group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, long-term exposure to inappropriate content television programs causes adverse effects on young people's mental health and behaviors. In general, different kinds of programs are shown in television nowadays, some of which have bad contents, such as those movies or programs which horror, violent, and sexual contents. Being exposed to these inappropriate programs, youth are faced with serious problems in their lives. For instance, those people who watch violent movies, like "Arrow" movie, become aggressive individuals and show violent behaviors in the future. Some of these young people tend to be attracedattracted toward unsuitable social behaviors, and they are more likely to commit crimes or become vandals in society. Moreover, those individuals exposed to horror programs might be faced with some issues, such as sleep disturbance and other disorders. Therefore, as these examples illustrate, exposure to unsuitable television programs negatively affect juveniles' behaviors and cause problems for their mental health.
Secondly, when young people watch television, in the long run, they become inactive individuals. To clarify this point, many today young people are students and need to dedicate sufficentsufficient time to their studying for their course materials. When they watch television, since there are a rich diversity of enjoyable and amazing movies and programs showed in television, individuals are attracted to these programs. In the long term, they get addicted to these attractive programs, and instead of devoting their time to their education, they become lazy and inactive people and waste their time through watchnigwatching series or programs that do not have any positive outcomes for them. As a result, some television programs influence youngsters' behaviors and make them inactive and lazy individuals.
To conclude, movies and television programs dramatically affect youth's behaviors in a negative way. Not only do inappropriteinappropriate-context movies and series adversely influence their mental health and cuasecause some mental problems for them, but also attractive programs and movies lead young people to become inactive human beings, which in turn results in wasting time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, in general, in particular, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2457.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.82227488152 4.8611393121 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28066255407 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521327014218 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3855547703 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.529411765 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8235294118 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64705882353 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191209565211 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662176734396 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409575589175 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123229569016 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255362296138 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 58.1214874552 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.77 10.9000537634 154% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.002688172 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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