Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern world, with its galloping progress in technology, multimedias play an increasingly pivotal role in people's life style. besides children are the most sensitive group in every societies. one controversial question that arises In this regard wether movies and television have more negative effects on childern or not. some people believe that they have more negative effects but others believe in opposite way. In my perspective, movies and television have more positive impacts on childeren than negative. I feel this way for some reasons which are pinpointed in the following.
To begin with, children are advanture and curious about events that happend around the world. So its important to face with information and sources to develope their mind and be more knowladgable person in the future. movies and television benefit children to get familiar with modern and usefull datas in order to set up appropiate goals and be guided to grasp them. To illustrate my point, my nephew have talente in handycraft. handycraft Tv programs are apeal to him. As a result of watching that programs we found his ability and submited him to a class to advance this ability.
Additionally, beside of television and movies there are many other items that could attract childeren for entertaimant. Amoung all of them internet is the most influential on children's conducts so if parents restrict them to spend time on tv they spend a lot of time on cellphones and internet which are more wider and harder to manage. for instance, these days we are encounter with a generation of childeren who are crazy about online games which distract children from their lessons and more attractive than multimedias. So its vital to take them away from being addict of games. In this situation proper movies can help parents to take away their children's mind from harmful games.
In a nutshell, by taking account all above reasons and many others, i strongly believe that television and movies have more positive influence on children since they helped to be more succesful in the future and perevent them to spend all their time on cellphones.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, so, for instance, i feel, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1791.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08806818182 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68537748926 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551136363636 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3486720297 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211995547111 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674480881833 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710529999908 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139437168528 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0932608801349 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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