Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by azarbarfi on Fri, 06/01/2018 - 11:58

In modern world, with galloping progress in technology and improvement of movie or television industries, no one couldn't deny the influence of media on human's behaviour. In this regard, a controversy question is that are movie and tv influence of youngs behavior is possitive or negative. I totally think that the influence of tv is possitive due to the fact of learning and motivate reasons which are pinpointed in the following.
First, television with its aspect in teach and direct the young mind to the brigh future through learning programs, play a vital role in people's life style. to illustrare this point, every year channels produce a significant number of show to warning about dangrous of alkohol and ciggarets. In addition many parents always monitoring their childeren to watch usefull tv shows and restricted them from saw adults movies.
Second, movies usually show the heroes and possitive characters in the story fighting demons and criminals. On the other hand, tv with live show of sport events encourage childeren to exercise every day and be a profesional athlet which result in many of young generations attracted to the gyms. Once my friend watch a movie about boxing and after that he starts going to the boxing club, after 5 years he became champion in Asia and find permission to the olympic event. However, many people don't agree with imitate celebritis life but we know every successfull human follow experiences of other's life in television and decide which way is proper for them.
In a nutshell, by taking account all above reasons and many others, i strongly believe that television and movies have possitive influence on childeren and young people because of their power to direct humans mind and learning from tv programs.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, in addition, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 291.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05841924399 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65594169493 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584192439863 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.3469327848 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.818181818 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4545454545 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09090909091 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141901742691 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05258299081 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417551825353 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0894840668653 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240444295917 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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