Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In my country, young people have a better life today than their parents enjoyed when they were young. Use reasons and examples to support your answer.
Living conditions affect many aspects of our lives these days and in the past. In my country, nowadays people are living a more leisurely life than in the past. The reason why I think this way is because of technology, peace, and education.
First and foremost, people have advanced technology that did not appear in the past. Year by year, since technology and facility continuously developed, people use it as a fundamental to promote technics. Having well-developed technology helps people do hazardous tasks such as space researches and nuclear weapons. For example, since working in a nuclear factory is dangerous and risky, many robots are used to replace humans. Machines can work continuously days and nights without stopping. This enhance productivity and decrease damage when accidents occur. However, in the past, people can only do safer and easier manufaturing jobs with low productivity. As the jobs can not be done quickly, other tasks that need that productions can be operated slower. In addition, as technology thrives, the connection between people will be enhanced. Thanks to the invention of smartphone, humans can communicate and observe each others without standing face to face. This is very helpful when they can not meet others because of diseases or other force majeure reasons. Though, in the past, parents have to meet each others to talk and do their jobs. This is inconvenient because it is not always possible for everyone to be face to face with others. Therefore, these days people can communicate more easily and simply. Indeed, young people nowadays have a better living condition than their parents when they are young.
Secondly, when parents are young, they have to suffer wars. Around 1900, Vietnam have to fight against colonial invasion. Since Vietnam have a good position, many countries tried to invade and exploit. They want to rob everything from the colony and bring back to their countries. As Vietnam is being exploited more and more, many people have to join the army to chase the ruling country. Hence, young people can live a peaceful life without war. Moreover, people being exploited are severely affected their health. Specifically, when dealing with toxic chemicals such as agent orange, the sodiers were seriously affected until the end of their lives. Specifically, it leads to injuries such as visual impairment, limbs loss,.... Not only the warriors were affected but also their family were affected as well. Since most of the soldiers are men, they are responsible to make a living for their family. Thus, if they cannot take the responsibility of earning money to raise their family, their children cannot live a life that they deserved. As a result, today’s generations is living lives that are much better then their parents because of peace.
Finally, in Vietnam, young people nowdays are more educated than people in the past. Since humans were developing day by day, people are able to seek for a better way to educate the next generations. This allow young people to learn faster and more effective than in the past. With modern technologies, these days people are able to study not only at school but also on the Internet. Owning a smartphone or a computer, students can access to every information they need to find as well as the device is connect to the Internet. Thus, there are much more ways to learn these days rather than going to schools. Furthermore, the amount of schools nowdays are more than in the past. In fact, about 50 years ago, a single town only have one school because not everyone are able to afford to study. At that time, people’s income is only from selling agricultural which does not too expensive. However, these days students do not need to bother about this financial problem because the governments support almost all the tuition for everyone until they finish high school. Also, many private schools were found in which the tuition is higher but the facilities are modern technology. Therefore, learning is much easier now than in the past. Indeed, with more options for learning, these days young people can live a better lives than their parents in the past.
In conclusion, in my country, living in modern days are much better than living in the past. Nowadays, people have access to modern technology, safety in the absence of war, and get to choose ways to learn. Therefore, nowadays, people can enjoy a higher quality life than in the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 15.1003584229 252% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 104.0 52.1666666667 199% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3721.0 1977.66487455 188% => OK
No of words: 743.0 407.700716846 182% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00807537012 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.22092198188 4.48103885553 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54749379666 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 333.0 212.727598566 157% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448183041723 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1158.3 618.680645161 187% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.51792114695 341% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 4.94265232975 364% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 47.0 20.6003584229 228% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.8779365053 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.170212766 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8085106383 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.51063829787 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294811845511 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723287201415 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693609617349 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166291731053 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560570758111 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 86.8835125448 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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