No one can deny the contribution of parents that they do for the smooth and better life of their children. They not only guide us during our childhood or teenage time, but also in our later life they have tremendous contributions. However, while some people think that parents should encourage their teenage children to engage in part-time job in order to be prepared for adult life and to face the harsh reality in future, I hold different view. For me, it seems to be unnecessary and not productive idea. I take this point on account of a couple of reasons.
First of all, to do a part-time job during teenage age adds extra pressure in the teenager's life and consequently, that teenager can lose his/he aim of goal amid of lots of pressures. My cousin's experience can be a compelling example for this point. My cousin was 16 years old and at that age, he just completed his secondary school exam. At that time my uncle, under the influence of his friend, persuaded my cousin to join in a restaurant as a helping hand to serve food. But the restaurant was always full of customer and he had to work morning to evening though he started the as a part-time work. In doing so, he has now no aim of pursuing further study. Because of misguidance from other workers, he thinks that higher study seems lots of challenge, rather it is easy to do. Hence, he has now no goal who once dreamed to be a entaprenur. Before joining there, He dreamed to create such a business where lots of people will work under him, thus he had a plan to reduce the burden of unemployment. Now, Nothing is left in his life. He is now just like a wayfarer.
In addition, whatever the type of job- part time or full time, there are always many responsibilities in job. and doing performing these responsibilities teenage student can loss the joy and vigor of their life. Moreover, It hampers their study. Ultimately, they can drop of from their study which is unexpected. Actually teenage time is the harvesting period for a person when s/he needs more care in order to be flourished as an enable perfect person. It's time to nurture one's dream which will him to purse for a better life during adulthood. For instance, My parents knew that I loved to stydy, to go through details in biological inventions. They inspired me to do the thing where I always find interest. So the full time during my teenage and young time I dedicated myself in my field of interest. Now. as an adult I am successful. I wonder, if my parents did the same thing like my uncle, where I would be right now? So in no way, UI think it is the best way to do part-time job during teenage age.
In conclusion, taking the above-mentined reasons and examples into consideration, It can be concluded that encouraging the teenage to do part-time job is an imprudent decision and no parent should do that thinking the unexpected the consequences in future,.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, while, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2387.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 522.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57279693487 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71215997268 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51724137931 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 756.9 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6223195229 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3103448276 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.51724137931 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298325295109 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796804529485 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755590837562 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216493162004 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684517564804 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.93 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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