Celebrity is a person who have already got success on his field and everyone knows him very well for his performance. Great number of people are follow them such as their life style, their walking, talking, social work, donation etc. Some cases they have great impact on our life specially the young people. As far as i am concerned, i agree with the statement and i think opinion of a celebrity have great impact on younger people rather than older people. For few significant reasons i fill that way.
First of all, Modern days entertainers like actors, singer, performer are role model of young boys and girls. most of the young generation are followed the famous personality. So if they have told about any controversial topic it will be viral in modern society. If they have take any move about a topic it will get huge impact. For example, in 2012 a famous pop star was says in a interview drinking was help him to sing a song. When young pop star are hard that they all are devoted to take drink before practice and perform. A single statement have motivated lots of young people to do somting good or bad.
In addition, Young people are connected a huge network like social network facebook, IMO,Viber,Whatsapp etc. when something occur anywhere or some actors are doing wrong it will know very short time. young generation are very short tempered for that reason they have got some time wrong discretion. For example, A famous cricketer are doing wrong at field young people say that he is fixing that match and they are make the topic very serious in social media. For that consequences this player are suspended.
Finally, older people are more concern about their family and job life, they have no time to follow celebrities. On the other hand, young people are followed famous person so if they told something it will be a big issue.
In sum, above the discussion it is clear that opinions of a celebrity is have great impact in young generation people. On the other hand, older people have no concern about some famous person what they talking and what they are doing in personal life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, so, well, for example, i think, in addition, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1744.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71351351351 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42422639834 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491891891892 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.138266056 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.0476190476 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.619047619 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251437566818 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749504114333 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073173681621 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154961117316 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05322908806 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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