Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Money is the most important prat in out live. People should know how to and where we need to spend money. To become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manager their own money at young age, so that they can learn from their mistakes and In future they will not repeat their mistake. I agree with the above statement and I feel in this way because of following reason which I will explain in following essay.
First of all, Childers start to administer his money from young age, he/she can make a lot of mistake and Childers can learn from that mistake. Although during this age, all these mistakes are avoidable because of small amount of money and children's learn from their mistake, such as spending money on unnecessary thing and losing money etc. For instance, When I was 12 years old my parents gave me little amount of money to buy grocery but unfortunately I lost my money somewhere and I don't realize. After that I learnt from that incident and I male habit of to keep my money in my pocket.
Secondly, when people from childhood begin to be responsible for their own finance, they can learn a lot of things directly and indirectly. For example, they receive a amount of money on every month in order to spend money. They need to write schedule so they will learn how to make a short time plan for their life. Although all aforementioned reasons are those which one maybe understand at first glance, still there is one reason. Studies showed that the sooner children start to become responsible for their finance, the better they will act in future life.
In conclusion, Any way parents have to play an important role during all this process and they are responsible to help their children's indirectly and give them advice for how to spend money.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: starts
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..., Childers start to administer his money from young age, he/she can make a lot of...
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Suggestion: a lot of mistakes
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...unately I lost my money somewhere and I dont realize. After that I learnt from that ...
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...t from that incident and I male habit of to keep my money in my pocket. Seco...
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...abit of to keep my money in my pocket. Secondly, when people from childhood beg...
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Suggestion: an
...d indirectly. For example, they receive a amount of money on every month in order...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1475.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6974522293 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41133281491 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509554140127 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1196912779 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.357142857 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316955473873 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108426895455 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0929658786703 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205160321063 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1327816918 0.0645574589148 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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