Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Finding a secure job has always been a mean to achieve prosperity and welfare in life. The definition of being secure can be considered from different point of views such as economic and social aspects. Although it might be thought that career diversity has been enhanced in the recent years, I believe that choosing a job which could bring success was easier in the past.
Firstly, before these new innovations and advances in technology, there were just limited type of jobs which were thought to assure a successful future. Careers such as being a doctor, an engineer, a businessman and etc. Although it might seem that all these jobs are still among the highest paid and respected professions, it should be said that not all the people working with aforementioned positions are prosperous. The abrupt burst in the amount of students seeking university education had led to increased number of individuals graduating and medicine, engineering and etc. Hence, finding a well-paid job for such newly graduates is not simple as it used to be.
Secondly, maintaining a secure job is a hard and tough mission nowadays. In business and trade, one should know all different and altering demands which exist or might appear in the market. Understanding the taste of the local or international customers is not as easy as it was in the past. A lot of factors have are combined to make a businessman rich or go bankrupt. Besides, the lifetime of a beneficial business might be just a few years nowadays. For instance, start-up companies should always keep up-to-date and be dynamic to meet the market demands or they will face failure and lose the competition to their opponents.
In conclusion, finding a job to make a brilliant future is not as used to be. This also does not mean that the current job opportunities will not bring prosperity. Overall it can be said that the chance for becoming successful over a long time have decreased, although diligent individuals still can make their life bright and secure.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
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Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ls graduating and medicine, engineering and etc. Hence, finding a well-paid job for such...
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Line 5, column 315, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
... was in the past. A lot of factors have are combined to make a businessman rich or ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93529411765 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8193658027 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547058823529 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4319524443 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7058823529 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64705882353 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120854881692 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0395676469791 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040428680307 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0761271719882 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271071780369 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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