Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
it is undoubtedly clear that technology affects everybody's future constantly. it could be in a positive or negative way but In case of job opportunities, I think technology improves the chance of having jobs in interest field compared to the past decade.
first, in the past the education level was lower and the jobs were simple so the job opportunities were demanding. bu advanced of technology and high level of education in the majority of the younger adults, jobs became more specified. In another word, anyone will enter into the specific area that has been studied for. besides, technology has been brought new job opportunities due to the novel industries that have been started up. for example google, Facebook, and Amazon are the new companies that just started recently and they got popular in a short term because of the new services they are giving to the people to ease their life. these companies started to hire annually more than 2000 people with high benefits that In my opinion, anyone who gets a chance to enter those companies would have a light future.
second in the past jobs was kind of hereditary which means that son's should follow the father's job even if he doesn't like it. In my family my grandfather was a rug seller and that was our family-specific job. therefore my farther also had to follow him wherase he doesn't have any interest of this job and unfortunately he couldn't handle it well and after my grandpa passed away he lost it.he lost his job because of this unusual tradition was in the past that not only doesn't have any life security but also can drop anyone from its own stage.
in conclusion, in the past, jobs were simple and everyone can do it, so the demand was high for a limited job, therefore the rate of firing people also was high. however, this days huge tech companies offer a variety of jobs in a different field with the high rate of hiring that give anyone who entered to them confidence of happy life. although in the past there were some family jobs human's interest is changing by the time and it's clear when there is not interest to success also would happen. so I would say that today's people with a little caution and right decision can get involved in successful future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64646464646 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47623641047 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527777777778 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.6636169471 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.666666667 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53333333333 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183766787771 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663742975804 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359636398919 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111397212832 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316379985494 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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