Decision making is a crucial thing in human life. The argument that is often raised regarding this topic is whether to young people can make decisions for their own lives now days or it's better to leave it to their parents. If I were obliged to choose, I think today young people are better able to make their own decisions for several reasons, on a few of which I will elaborate subsequently.
First, I think young people are more aware that they were before. Almost all of the children goes to school now days, after that they go to colleges and universities and learn lots of things there, thus today young people have much more knowledge that they have in the past. They can choose make decisions more wisely and maybe better than their parents in some cases. I believe my opinion is partially influenced by my personal experience, you see, I am an entrepreneur now, I chose my way after I got my bachelor degree and based on things I learned in the university. I remember that my father always wanted me to become an engineer and find e proper job in a good company, but I chose my decision and builded up my own company and now I make money more than any engineer employee.
Secondly, life and technology is on fast-forward these days, you got to be updated to make good decisions. Today parents are not that familiar with technologies and it make them less aware from trends. But younger people are masters in using technology, they follow world's trends so good and they can find opportunities that leds to success. For instance, I had a friend who was a dentist, He always been update with latest news and technologies were anounced around the world, once he got familiar with a new method in denistary that helps tooth to heal in very short time after surgery. He decided to travel to Germany to learn about that method, after that he came back and used that method on his patients and it results to more patients coming to him and better money as well.
To sum it up, I think young people are able to make decisions about their own lives, because not only they have more knowledge than young people had in past, but they can find opportunities better due to their updated mindsets.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 74, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ore aware that they were before. Almost all of the children goes to school now days, after...
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Line 3, column 292, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to make'
Suggestion: to make
... they have in the past. They can choose make decisions more wisely and maybe better ...
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Line 5, column 169, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
... that familiar with technologies and it make them less aware from trends. But younge...
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Line 5, column 394, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'been'.
Suggestion: been always
...e, I had a friend who was a dentist, He always been update with latest news and technologie...
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Line 5, column 413, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the latest'.
Suggestion: with the latest
...ho was a dentist, He always been update with latest news and technologies were anounced aro...
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Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...ve more knowledge than young people had in past, but they can find opportunities better...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, i think, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1806.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54911838791 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43565755325 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511335012594 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.6436848148 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.0 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3571428571 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374432984086 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143059596551 0.076458572812 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108556702041 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265966401143 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120888601437 0.0645574589148 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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