undoubtedly, desertification has always been a controversial topic among people and governments. More specifically the writer puts forth on the idea that box-shaped devices will not be successful in fighting against desertification. However, the professor points out that there are some serious flaws in the writer's claims. To be exact, the professor believes that this devices can help trees to grow in such climate. She more or less addresses the problem with each point made in the reading.
First of all, the writer claims that to get meaningful results in fighting desertification, countries should grow millions of trees, and providing millions of this devices will cost so much that lots of countries can't afford. But the professor refutes with this point and says that countries can reuse each device up to 20 times or even more, when a tree grows enough in a device, the device can get removed and get installed on another young tree.
Secondly, the reading states that since local people are affected by desertification work long days in harsh conditions, and barely can manage to provide food for their families, they would not help in installing and maintaining devices. They have not proper motivation. The professor, not surprisingly though, believes that there are possible rewards for locals for maintain and install devices. They can use water provided by devices to grow their own vegetables and use older trees branched for fire.
Finally, the author wraps up the topic by claiming that trees that have outgrown the device have to deal with unforgiving environmental conditions on their own and they will not survive long in such condition. Then again, the professor stays on the other side of the argument and says that trees that old enough and outgrown the device have ling roots that reach water under the ground and they can survive for month in harsh condition.
- TOEFL T P O 15 Integrated Writing Task 3
- TOEFL T P O 1 Integrated Writing Task 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives Use specific reasons and examples to su 70
- TOEFL T P O 10 Integrated Writing Task 3
- Because of climate change more and more land that was once used to grow crops or provide food for animals is turning to dry unusable desert land There are many proposals about how to stop this process known as desertification A number of proposals involve 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Undoubtedly
undoubtedly, desertification has always been a cont...
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Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...o be exact, the professor believes that this devices can help trees to grow in such ...
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Line 3, column 160, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ons of trees, and providing millions of this devices will cost so much that lots of ...
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Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ill cost so much that lots of countries cant afford. But the professor refutes with ...
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Line 7, column 342, Rule ID: LING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'long'?
Suggestion: long
...old enough and outgrown the device have ling roots that reach water under the ground...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, first of all, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 311.0 270.72406181 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09646302251 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7353575096 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540192926045 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5134875852 49.2860985944 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.923076923 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9230769231 21.698381199 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76923076923 7.06452816374 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103043967866 0.272083759551 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0402248859525 0.0996497079465 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0303393834926 0.0662205650399 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0647085826973 0.162205337803 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345663066857 0.0443174109184 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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