Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign country.
Views differ when it come to selection a destenation for your trip. Some people are inclined toward the ideat that it is neumerous advantages in traveling in our own country. However, others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that there are plenty benefits to travel abroad compared in our own country. In my perspective, trip in our own country is more beneficials for us becaue not only it is more convenient, but also it cost less money.
The first reason worth mentioning is that traveling in our own country is more comfortable for us. Any countries around the world have their own culture and language which it may be sophisticated for us to understand it. Many countries have diverse traditions which can make us uncomfortabe when seeing them. For example, when I travel to a specific country, there was a competition that people should run naked. It maked me very comfrotable since it war really wierd. Moreover, foregin country language is different from our language and we can not communciate with other people in there. For instance, I had some experience in talking arabic language when I traveled to Dubai. In the ariport I take an taxi and tried to tell him to take me to hotel. Because of my poor skill in their language he could not understand what I was tring to say and it take a lot of my time. But, when you travel inside your own country, you will not face this problem since you speak them same language.
The furthure reason to point is that the cost of traveling abroad is very much. In these days many people have financial problems and they can not save a lot of money. Traveling to other country will cost many money and many people can not efford it since they have other needs. Hence, people decide to travel in their own country since its price is low. For instance, when I was a teenager, one of my dreams was to travel to the France. I worked really hard and saved money for two years. The ticket of it was really expencive and I spend most of money buying it. After coming back I was ashamed of my decision since it take all of my money. I could spend it wisely on cheaper trip.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, traveling in your country is a better decision since it is easier for you and it expensed is lower.
- In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. 60
- In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. 60
- TPO30 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign country. 70
- People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries 71
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 22, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comes'?
Suggestion: comes
Views differ when it come to selection a destenation for your tri...
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Line 3, column 702, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...raveled to Dubai. In the ariport I take an taxi and tried to tell him to take me t...
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Line 3, column 851, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'takes'?
Suggestion: takes
...derstand what I was tring to say and it take a lot of my time. But, when you travel ...
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Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...y. Traveling to other country will cost many money and many people can not efford it...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, as to, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51682692308 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48649737458 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473557692308 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3445764438 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.2916666667 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04166666667 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270922666298 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787328711704 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709392438054 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169950592212 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052050789169 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.64 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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