Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign country.
Many people have a hectic life in todays' world since they have devote most of their time on working. Traveling in one of the amusing hobby of these people. Some people are inclined toward the idea that there are many advantage in traveling inside our country. However, others may hold an opposite viewpoint and believe that traveling abroad is more beneficial for people. In my perspective, people benift more from traveling to foreign countries compare to their own country since not only they learn about their culture, but also they learn new things.
The first point worth mentioning is that people gain a rudimental knowledge of foreign country in a meticulous details. Countries all around the world have their past history and because of that they have their unique tradition and culture in the present days which are interesting for people. A person who travel to a specific country like Spain, can acquire information about their sacred rituals, competitions and domestic food. For example, there is a color rituals that people attend in it and throw color at each other. This kind of tradition is a for entertainment that are attractive to any person. Also, people can learn about the nutrients and materials that others use in their food which can have positive effects on health of human.
A further more subtle to point is that we can improve our knowledge by learning another language and high-tech devices. Learning language is a challenging tasks for many people. One of the merits of traveling abroad is that we can learn another language since it forces us to socialize with people of there. For example, when a student want to travel to a foreign country, he has to learn rudimentary knowledge of their language in a practical way. Since he will interact with other people, he gain a better understanding of the language. Moreover, people can use the advanced technology and facilities like subway which use it for transportation. Therefore, a person can gain a better idea about all the conveniences his country lack and improve his information about other country. Therefore, these experiences extend mind of people.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, due to learn other cultures and enhance our understanding, it is more necessary for all people around the world to try abroad trip.
- TPO5 3
- In order to become financially responsible adults children should learn to manage their own money at a young age 70
- TPO 18 70
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'devoted'.
Suggestion: devoted
...ic life in todays world since they have devote most of their time on working. Travelin...
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Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun advantage seems to be countable; consider using: 'many advantages'.
Suggestion: many advantages
...inclined toward the idea that there are many advantage in traveling inside our country. Howeve...
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Line 3, column 112, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'detail'?
Suggestion: detail
...edge of foreign country in a meticulous details. Countries all around the world have th...
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Line 3, column 463, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'ritual'?
Suggestion: ritual
...tic food. For example, there is a color rituals that people attend in it and throw colo...
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Line 7, column 156, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'task'?
Suggestion: task
...ces. Learning language is a challenging tasks for many people. One of the merits of t...
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Line 7, column 430, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a practical way" with adverb for "practical"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...rudimentary knowledge of their language in a practical way. Since he will interact with other peop...
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Line 7, column 495, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gains'.
Suggestion: gains
... he will interact with other people, he gain a better understanding of the language....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, as to, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1960.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02564102564 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70276966084 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484615384615 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.283425258 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23617357062 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729948805024 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663921382134 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14894244432 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0923083057614 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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