The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Throughout history, in all civilized societies, the issue of celebrities' place engendered copious controvcersies among people. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that young people applaud well-known persons. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that older people respect famous entertainers and athletes more than young people. As far as I am concerned, the opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite reason should be mentioned is that celebrities have a better place in a societies today. Nowadays, the development of the technology happening at a very fast pace and this make many chances for people to become famous and many people become actress or even football player since the society needs this kind of job more than the past. For example, my friend who is studying in university, love cristiana ronaldo and he try really hard to do an arduous task to become like him in the future. Moreover, celebrities did not have a good situation in the past and it is one of reasons older people do not care about celebrities and another point is that they do not have time to search about these celebrities in internet or in magazine because they have a lot responsibilities in their lives. To clarifies, take the example of me and my uncle. Both of us going to stadium to watch play of our favorite player but after my uncle get married he never come with me because he gets to busy.
The second significant reason supporting my idea is that famous people inspire many juveniles. it is very hard to live in this hectic life and it is crucial for children to make someone their goal. Hence, children make their life easier by determining a successful person their goal. For instance, my cousin who is studying acting and migrate to another country, love an actor in our country and he tries to become a movie star like him and by this way he got motivated to try to become a prosperous person like him. In additional, older people are muter and they do not need some roll model in their life and when they facing a problem they use their experiences in their life. But younger people imitate famous people no matter what. For instance, if a football player help cleaning the park or do something the community do not accept it they imitate him.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned argument, there are more advantages for young people to duplicate or love celebrities. Consequently, it is highly recommended that juveniles select a roll model and try hard to progress and do not lose their path. In fact, there is myriad of other reasons, challenging the above statement, which could be mentioned but is not embraced due to the dearth of time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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...iversity, love cristiana ronaldo and he try really hard to do an arduous task to be...
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Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to clean' or 'clean'.
Suggestion: to clean; clean
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2331.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80618556701 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70447565027 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513402061856 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 752.4 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3279021872 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0952380952 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.80952380952 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249556488924 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725778490333 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0917088472918 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155385947138 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104798907432 0.0645574589148 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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