It is clear a high degree of media and audience attention is naturally pointed to celebrities whenever they make a speech about anything. That being said, I strongly believe it is always the young people that are greatly influenced by such words from big stars, as compared to the older generations.
There is no doubt young people constitute a big proportion in the number of famous stars' followers as they are more accustomed to the world of Internet and social media. By joining several social platforms where the pool of opinions are overflowing, young users tend to resort to listen to the outstanding individuals who they idolize. As a result, words from their beloved celebrities always seem to weigh more, and thus have more impact on their life than words from other people, even their family and friends, irrespective of matters. My sister is a typical example of this. Back then in COVID years, she wouldn’t agree to go for the vaccine shot for due to irrational fear of needles. No one in my family or any of her friends could convince her to get vaccinated, even though we tried every reason we could think of. That was not until some days later when her favorite singer publicly expressed his opinion on COVID vaccines and advised everyone to get injected that my fearful sister said yes to a vaccine appointment. One can never realize how much celebrities are influencing on young people on every aspects of life.
On the other hand, to older grown-ups who have experienced quite enough in life, speeches from celebrities actually do not convey any especially meaningful or helpful messages. This is not to mention most superstars are only of the same age or even much younger than these adults. Most of what they say probably sound unrelated or immature to people who have spent more time in the life. For example, we can barely expect our parents to resonate with and be influenced by what a famous entertainer is talking on TV about gaining strength and striving in life. They will be likely to think that such things have nothing to do with their life and that they have learned enough. In other words, older generations are not easily influenced by other unexperienced human-beings even if they're well-known around the world.
In conclusion, it is safe to say older generations are never the target market of entertainment industry since they are long proved less likely to listen to and value celebrities' opinions. In contrast, young people who just begin their life journey and are more active on the internet seem to obtain far more impacts from what their idols have to say.
- TPO 44 Integrated Writing Task 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject 80
- TPO 62 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement After completing high school students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 83
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The extended family grandparents cousins aunts and uncles is less important now than it was in the past Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 70
- TPO53 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 93
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...sten to and value celebrities opinions. In contrast, young people who just begin t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, if, so, then, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, no doubt, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2163.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8389261745 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59159490039 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543624161074 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0785156066 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.166666667 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8333333333 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197208557098 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596962421869 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367676752962 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121694952401 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00998606554855 0.0645574589148 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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