Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, time management is a crucial consideration in many people's life. Some think that people spend most of their time on personal activities, which they have fun, rather than doing their responsibilities. While happiness is the most important thing in my life, I disagree with the statement since the personal-enjoyment activities are not a waste of time, indeed beneficial for our life.
Firstly, a person should decide his or her career wisely by considering both money and happiness, as it affects people's lives in many ways. Almost every human beings expect whether their academic or working career to be satisfied and to have pleasure, in the fact that it can be acquired by combining responsibilities and entertainments. Although some argue that people spend too much time on personal enjoyment, behind the scene, the people, who have a career like this, are successful and be pleased with the time they have spent for.
Secondly, sometimes, responsibilities are not fun at all, and people should spend their time on personal enjoyment to be happy. Instead, as a waste, spending time on those activities are significantly necessary to not get stressed. A healthy life influenced by stress, according to numerous research. For example, if students fail in their exams and not able to get rid of thinking the future failures, in the long term, their academic success would be affected dramatically. Therefore, the students need to spend their time on not only with their courses that they should study, but also enjoyment where they relief, whereas, the enjoyment is not too much.
Finally, people who consider both money and happiness who have been spending their time on enjoyment, not too much, but reasonable. Moreover, for a healthy and successful life of the students, the enjoyment time is vital and not a waste of time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g their time on enjoyment, not too much, but reasonable. Moreover, for a healthy ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1551.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15282392027 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96793234785 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541528239203 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1733531507 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.307692308 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244664208735 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869139517161 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074865732377 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152180703145 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650691746106 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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