With the advancement of technology, computers become basic equipment for students, due to myriads of learning resources on the internet. Some of parents stated that students who own computers would waste time on playing computer games, while others choose to believe that playing games are beneficial to children. For me, I agree with the latter one.
First of all, leisure activities are necessary in children’s daily life, because children, even adults, have to take a rest. Then, computer game plays a important role in children’s leisure activities. They could help children relieve their stress on academic works. Furthermore, some researches claims that adequate rest, such as computer games, could efficaciously increase the efficiency of learning. After the rest, we could think in a better way. Therefore, playing computer games isn’t a waste of time because it is a great leisure activity for children.
Secondly, online games are good path to meet some new friends. While playing computer games, children might enjoy cooperating with others and it would be a rare chance to know a new friend. Through the process of playing online together, they might go out playing and become closer eventually. However, some parents would argue that friends that meet online are always not good people. But if we make friends more carefully and don’t easily believe others, it wouldn’t be a trouble. Consequently, time that used to playing games could be utilized wisely to make new friends.
Admittedly, parents consider that children couldn’t acquire any knowledge in computer games, so, in parents’ mind, it’s such a waste of time. However, when playing computer games could learn knowledge and even improve our thinking skills. Strategy games, for example, that you have to come up with a method to conquer every stage could train children the ability of thinking correctly and creatively. In this case, I didn’t consider that was such a waste of time for children. In the contrary, playing computer games have great influential to children’s learning.
As a result, computer games seem to be harmful to children’s growth, but, in practical, they have lots of advantages, such as learning knowledge and expanding social networks, for children.
- TOEFL T P O 4 Integrated Writing Task 3
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- TOEFL T P O 4 Integrated Writing Task 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Playing computer games is a waste of time Children should not be allowed to play them Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 80
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Some of', you should use 'the' ('Some of the parents') or simply say ''Some parents''.
Suggestion: Some of the parents; Some parents
... of learning resources on the internet. Some of parents stated that students who own computers ...
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Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... take a rest. Then, computer game plays a important role in children’s leisure ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35376044568 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72505413428 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523676880223 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2727661281 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5238095238 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0952380952 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90476190476 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307316146814 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103866635389 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075073836613 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184958059429 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426477786895 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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