Many people agree about the idea that video games are beneficial for them to spend their leisure time and that is a kind of entertainment. In my opinion I disagree since video games are waste of money , time, obesity and teach people bad behavior.
First of all, many children all over the world consider video games part of their fun that they have to play and spend their free time. However I think it is not right because its waste of time which they can use to do school work. For instance, My son used to play video games for hours. Last time , when I tried to tell him that he has to memorize some vocabulary for the science test he could not respond and got upset .and started screaming at me and broke the plates which they ere in front of him. few weeks ago, I read an article about the relationship between aggression and video games. It mentioned that more people play games more aggressive they get. so if my son did not play video games , he would not be as aggressive as he a week before.
Secondly, Video games are expensive, I remember on time i bought a game for my son and it was fifty dollars. This amount of money i can buy groceries for a week specially I am single mom and my salary is not enough to keep up with inflation. I had to try with my son to quit playing, so we can use the money in other products that we need. On top of that, the price of X Box is high.
third, playing games and stay sitting for hours may cause obesity. For instance, My nephew used to play for hours and hours with non stop. Last year he had to visit a nutritionist to regulate his food since he gained about fifty pounds. The first suggestion for the doctor was that my nephew to stop playing video games and go out for a walk.
Finally, In my opinion, To play video games, is not healthy, not good financially and effect our school performance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, as to, for instance, i think, kind of, first of all, in my opinion, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39306358382 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54588679254 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543352601156 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0483538824 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4117647059 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3529411765 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52941176471 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19813932239 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721332433463 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481387986707 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1117020636 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425515427738 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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