By and large, people seek freedom, in any form, to flourish and to be able to demonstrate their abilities and talents. Restrictions posed by the governments are supposed to pave the way for the growth of humans and in the same breath to guard them from the dangers that might be opposed upon them by any means. There is a plethora of people who are in the conviction that society's expectations of youngsters to obey certain rules are too strict, others take a radically different point of view and disagree. To the extent that my personal perspective is concerned, I accord with the first group. Among countless reasons which give adherence to my opinion, I will delve into the most important ones in what follows.
Firstly, rules manifest themselves as guidelines of safety and comfort for the society members. Though rules are necessary in order to avoid chaos, they should also have the flexibility to accord with modern needs and desires. Take the prohibition of consuming alcohol in Iran for example. This law has been enacted to guarantee the common good, to limit acts of aggression that my happen in the absence of a humans ability to have a full control on themselves and in the meantime to assure the full healthiness of people. In action, Not only did this law brought about catastrophic results regarding the health of the society, but it also boosted the growth of organized crime associations. Deprived from the legal and of course less harmful liquor people faced to underground organizations that provided deadly liquors. The statistics show that virtually 6000 die as a result of consuming nonstandard liquor.
Secondly, the rules were aimed to ease the life. In the absence of any modernization sense, to allow congressmen to decide more properly, they promote more restrictions to modern technologies. Anything that seems abnormal should be restricted, old fashion minds believe. Though Gone are the days where anyone whom owned a movie rent club in Iran, was being treated as a criminal, but yet the same act is being employed toward any new technological advancement. Bitcoin for example, is being treated as a currency of pedophiles and criminals. Massive amount of knowledge and hard work that has been invested on it and the marvelous opportunities that it can bring about are being neglected. Calling any activity that has anything to do with Bitcoin illegal, the congressmen throw away the youngsters opportunity to flourish. The same attitude are being act on in music in Iran. Not legal is the new brand that's being pervasive to all kinds of music that doesn't fit in the category of "Classical music".
In short all the aforementioned reasons and explanations leads to the conclusion that the laws nowadays are too strict for youngsters to follow.
- 11.In times of an economic crisis, in which area should governments reduce their spending?1. Arts2. Scientific research3. Parks and public gardens.(The Preference type, three sides of the issue should be discussed, but focusing on one) 80
- TPO- 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 90
- Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- The personal and work-related challenges that young people face today are not very different from the challenges their parents and grandparents faced in the past 73
- It is better to take a secure job with a low pay than to take a job with a high pay but is easy to lose 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
...sion that my happen in the absence of a humans ability to have a full control on thems...
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Message: Did you mean 'bring'?
Suggestion: bring
...eople. In action, Not only did this law brought about catastrophic results regarding th...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'die' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'dice', 'dies'.
Suggestion: dice; dies
...The statistics show that virtually 6000 die as a result of consuming nonstandard li...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youngsters'' or 'youngster's'?
Suggestion: youngsters'; youngster's
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Suggestion: that's
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Suggestion: doesn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, for example, in short, of course, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2329.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01939655172 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86363866256 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560344827586 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3864650496 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.863636364 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0909090909 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.59090909091 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114652020064 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0307733220344 0.076458572812 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496655918432 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0857542781295 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530900438726 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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